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Mom & I (haiku)

Mom and I, dearest,
Best friends, almost as sisters.
Always, Forever.

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My first haiku!

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  • Goddess of Discord
    May 9, 2008

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    This makes me want to cry. I never got to have this with my mom. She died just before I turned sixteen and I really miss her sometimes. I'm glad you have this with your mom. Cherish it and remember that some of us are not so lucky.


  • stavykm gold member
    May 8, 2008
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    So Sweet

    This is just beautiful. So close to your mother you are. Excellent for your first haiku. I don't even know how to do those poems. Truly a nice read. I wish I had this kind of relationship with me mom. So appropriate for Mothers Day coming up.
    Many Blessings
    Kelle Marie
    stavykm


  • grannyeri gold member
    February 2, 2008
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    Wonderful to feel this way - sentiments well expressed in these three lines. Haiku have certain requirements other than the 17 syllables in the traditional ones, just thought I'd share them with you in this link,
    http://allpoetry.com/column/show/2340132. Keep writing. Thanks for commenting on Lost Daughter.


  • Candy6
    May 3, 2007

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    Very nice poem. My adoptive mom and I were so close friends, too but she is now living in heaven. She is pain free from cancer.


  • patsoldcat
    April 30, 2007

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    wow

    short but full of the image of how perfect love is in today when families are apart for the wrong reasons some of us still see this love for their mom.

    great

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