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Her First Time

      "Don't you want to come with me?"
      There's a truck in the back.
      Waiting for you.

      One step around the corner,
      And there it is.  Your magic carpet.

      Take his hand, it is your light, your guide.
      "Don't you want to feel my bones on your bones?"
      You feel your face form a smile but you're apprehensive.

      One last hesitation.  One last look back.  One last sigh.
                      And then a leap.

                      Cold metal presses against your skin.
                      "My love for you is better than diamonds."
                      The wind whistles a gentle tune.  You feel like crying.

                      The moon winks at you, suggesting perfection.
                      The stars glow with wonder.  They're watching.

"To you everything I bestow."
Shadows grow, stand up, approach you.
Hide in his eyes.  The moon has set.

You check your pulse.  Steady heart beat.
You don't believe it. Check his.  Same beat.

You say "Kiss me and tell me it's not broken."
A quick kiss on your forehead feels cold and wet.
"I'll give you the stars from the bruised evening sky."

Everything is bruised tonight.  The stars refuse to look at you.
It is broken.

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  • fatarse
    April 12, 2007
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    powerful and honest...
    great to see