No longer will I cry at night.
I will swallow my tears,
though many.
I know the pain I try to hide.
I know that I push it too deep inside.
I feel it pushing back harder than before.
I feel it becoming much of a chore.
No longer will I be afraid.
I will stand tall,
though alone.
No longer will I fear others.
I will fight back,
though futile.
I know the jeers that pierce me.
I know the the need to beg and plea.
I feel power of anger within.
I feel a tingling through my skin.
No longer will I hold back.
I will give them my all,
though they don't stand a chance.
Author notes
I don't know how I came up with this poem, but I like the way it builds.
My name is buddyboy597.
A contest entry
- My Faves Only... Rounds Contest!!!!!! by in-the-twilight.
600 points, ended April 29, 2007, 11 entries
Silver trophy winner
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awesome poem. is your name BuddyBoy or BuddyBoy597 ? cuz u said that buddyboy597 was your twin, so i was just wondering that. or if u guys are the same person or not, lol. u rock, xoxox Kandy <3
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Great poem..very well done you are a great writer and keep writing...I can sence a lot of energy in this poem...good luck with the contest and I hope that you have a good night
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I liked the structure of this poem. this staza is my favorite "I know the jeers that pierce me.
I know the the need to beg and plea.
I feel power of anger within.
I feel a tingling through my skin." great write
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This poem had a uniqueness to it. And I really loved the ending. Although the physical side may not be present, the mental and emotional side sure was. Well done, and all the best in the contest.
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this poem surprised me. I love the theme of the write but the build and structure kinda threw me for a loop. I loved these lines-
I know the pain I try to hide.
I know that I push it too deep inside.
I feel it pushing back harder than before.
I feel it becoming much of a chore.
i can def. relate. all in all this is a very very very excellent poem i really enjoyed it and it affected me greatly.
Great Job!
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The build was great. It's really hopeful, at the end, where you say you aren't going to take the crap anymore.
'I will fight back,
though futile.'
and
'I will give them my all,
though they don't stand a chance.'
Those are really contrasting, which is great. I like it. Good luck in the contest. -
Thanks for fixing it my friend!
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Author's name??????? I will give you till tomorrow to edit this and let me know who you are (Just to double check you're in my faves...)
Now to the poem. I liked it... great flow... I like the build and emotion... powerful write! Thanks for entering... but tomorrow it will be DQed if it doesn't have an author's name in the comments. Thanks! Rock on! xoxo Meg
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