on the table a glass vase
fills with dawn: daffodil,
corn flower, poppy and a few rays
of anemone. i recall
mornings
when there were more
long-stemmed
colours
than my heart
could hold
In a list
A contest entry
- Good things... by AJ Morelli.
1000 points, ended April 15, 2007, 28 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - personal favorite by Virgoan.
2000 points, ended June 9, 2008, 64 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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looking around for inspiration... nicolette this is amazing.
love the simplicity
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thank you, that is so kind of you
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This came up on my 'poetry you might like' thing and I remembered seeing your name on Allyce May's page... I'm glad I took the time. I always envy-admire poetry like this, that can be so grounded in simple things but uses its metaphor so brilliantly. I love the un-flashiness of this piece, how understated it is - all of it just adds to the effect. I think I have a new favorite.
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thank you, Connor. this is one of my own favourite pieces too.
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Nature has a way of spilling the nectar of reality on the page when you and its essence mix. Your poetry is flowered with enchantment, and traces of wanton desire. Your words are lingering. You always manage to take brevity to the deepest and greatest heights. Congratulations on earning a much deserved Gold Chalice.
Much LOVE Always ♥
Renee
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you always write the most wonderful comments, Renee. thank you, my friend
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This is lovely! The tone is gentle, like mornin' light. The flowers are described with simple detail that somehow makes each one stand out brilliantly. Nicely done!, Dannie
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thank you so much, Dannie
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Ah what beauty
I shall remember this when next I buy my wife flowers! Frans
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One of my favourites by you! I like this lots and lots.. Beautiful, Nic
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Wow. Simply outstanding, you have to seriously stop taking away my breath! Beautiful. Sigh~ Such poetry... rare experience...
Candy
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Candy... you are wonderful!
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Really good. Definetly deserved gold.
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Damn
How I wish I could spill my thoughts with such grandeur as this...
You rock girl...
Mal
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Thanks, Mal...ones like these only spill from the pen every once in a while...
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Simple poetry...done well. I've been reading and deleting for about an hour. I am refreshed. Thanks for the entry.
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very beautiful
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perfect.
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a well deserved win, lovely work.
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Thank you...
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i like this very much... especially the conclusion. And again this poem in it's spare beginnings ends with happiness remembered. personally my poems speak of dark things... but you've shown me deep isn't always dark...so congratulations
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Thank you edward...there's a little darkness (or rather melancholy) here in this vase too
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As always you take something familair ...and spin it to just where you want it ..
A vase, a still-life, we could pass by it, or perhaps even forget it, were it not for the colors and the rainbow they suggest..
Congratulations... !
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Thank you, my friend - good to see you again!!
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Oh mornings... how they can be tragic sometimes but most often than not, they always bring new colors to our hearts. Nic, you're one of the reasons why I keep coming back to AP. You are a gem.
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Hello, my friend - I just saw your name - so good to see again. Thank you - you're a gem too
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Absolutely breathtaking! Such simplicity goes above and beyond a few lines. My jaw actually dropped. Insanely exquisite!
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I so loved your comment - thank you, Cinnarry
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Ah . . . just ah . . . just awe!!!
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first rate container...
a verdant variation of sorts. how can a vase be big enough to hold anything you have to offer? your scores are large in character and bliss. i see triumph in your configuration.
ominous anonymous enemy anemone anomally
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Thank you for such a great comment - you have a fine poetic eye!
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Beautyful
I love cornflowers!!!! lol soo pretty. I love the imagery in this and the relatable sentence " When there were more long stemmed colors than my heart could hold." It reminds me of my heart bursting with feeling...lol. Awesome write, Jane
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Excellent--shades of William Carlos Williams, a favorite poet & influence...
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Thank you, mtpoet - that's a great compliment...
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i have not been able to let myself cry, this brought forth the tears, more for joy and love than sadness, my eyes needed the bath, so did my soul. beautiful words here, simply beautiful. i especially liked 'long stem colours' it describres happiness so well. just perfection.
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Rebeka, thank you for the beauty of your words...and I'm happy that this little poem served to bathe and smooth your eyes and soul...all the little things...
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oh dear, this is just precious and I see you have already taken home a new trophy for your superb quality of work.
Tamara
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Thank you, Tamara
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Nicolette,
colours and flower, love and more. These are images I love to read, words that just come off the readers tongue like chords off a piano. A gentle breeze with a cool creek. you are the vase, and not empty but full, over full, overflowing you share this piece, a poem that has something that must be seen. Not all that long ago it seemed you wrote pieces like this effortlessly giving me food for thought, inspiration, but mostly pure enjoyment, and now it is here in this piece again. thank you, and congratulations. A better friend would have given more accolades sooner, but I have been remiss. My love
Jim
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Jim, I can not imagine anyone giving me more accolades than you do, my friend! Thank you for the beauty and the sincerity of your comments - such a pleasure to read your words. I owe you a few comments by now too ~
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No wonder you took gold here Nicolette. This piece is like a ray of light captured in that glass vase of which you speak.
Sigh.
Thank you for sharing, and congrats.
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Truly beautiful, congratulations on the gold! Not a misplaced decision by the judge!
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such a beautiful poem
well done
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Ah, excellent, congratulations to you on gold, this speaks so much with the least amount of words and wonderful imagery in one vivid scene, a wonderful poem!
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well deserved and absolutely lovely...
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Sooo well deserved Nicolette, I knew this shone gold when I read it.
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Thank you, Kathleen...this one really came as a surprise, but I like it...
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gorgeous
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Thanks, jan
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when there were more
long-stemmed
colours
i am beginning to remember those days and it is wonderful to still have those memories. well done and i would like to congratulate you on the old trophy you have earned in this contest. viyanna rosemarie
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Thank you, viyanna rosemarie...I'm happy for the memories too
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one of my favorites in this contest ... and with all the extreme talent in this contest ... a write to be proud of ... congrats hun
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Thank you...yes, you are so right about the talent in this contest... I'm quite speechless now.
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I like this a lot. Such a good atmosphere in so little words.
Congrats -
I adore this piece, a sure contender here...
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Thank you, Al...
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Good imagery, I can almost imagine myself standing in my kitchen with a cup of coffee in my handing as I lean on the counter and stare at the vase on my dining table. Very well written, keep up the good work. Good luck in all future poems and God bless.
Onyx -
this is wonderful- love the use of the word anemone- so good to see you back here writing and bringing your perspective to us
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Wishing your vessel full to overflowing with life's velvet blooms... Pretty and pensive meanderings into good things. ~K
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very touching and poignant
a touch of wistful remembrance here and so tenderly described as if one's eye crossed a room and a simple thought stopped the movement and fixed on a moment. Very nicely done...PK
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this is beautiful.
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How did I miss this
A beautiful array of poetic splendor.I am so glad you are back posting this caliber of poetry I adore.
You truly know how to write an artistic piece.I am always refreshed after reading your work
~Helen
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this is excellent, flowing and beautiful...
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This is a breeze poem for me. I can feel the senses moving me. I like the precision of a seemingly perfect picture drawn through poetry. I absolutely love this piece.
No words can replace the refreshing feeling in reading your poem.
Thanks for sharing and see you around.
~VIRGOAN~
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I put my hand to my heart on the last line and sighed..
reminded myself that love doesn't always hurt so bad..
Beautiful my friend..
You never fail to amaze me,
Catressa
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How beautifully you have captured all of life, dear heart. I don't know if it was your intent but it has made me shine with the hope of a thousand suns. For around each little shadow lurks a super nova - that not many care to notice.
thanks for this,
chalice
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What can I say but the rest you took from writing looks really good on you
Beautiful work my friend!
~Lyrical
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I saw this new poem of you this morning, when I logged in at work just about 2 minutes before I had to open my doors for my customers...
It's 9.30PM now, almost 12 hours later and I can only say something about it now... I was overwhelmed by customers the whole day (not that friendly ones most of the time) and then went squashing after work to put off some steam (luckily)
Anyway, If I had the chance to read this poem more thouroughly this morning, then I probably would have been able not to let the nasty remarks of my customers come to my heart that quickly.
There's something about your words dear friend, there's really something about them that manage to sooth me in some strange way...
Thank you for this
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The ending of this poem is very unexpected and, in a bittersweet way, even heartwarming. The whole poem sounds like a great description to me, I loved the word economy and images, but the end is the most powerful part. It makes me think of those memories so could we didn't actually understand how happy we used to be (well, maybe that's just how I relate to the poem, but I really like it).
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I am glad that you are back dear Nic. Some memories will never fade away but as a pictures they will have its own special value. Really nice and soft poetic expression.
~Sonja~
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Excellent...and I'm so glad to see you're back with your amazing poetry
the longing, the sadness, the acceptence of what has passed, and what is...you have done this so beautifully. Good luck in the contest!
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Simply beautiful; the last lines were a perfect setting for this; I loved the referral to roses, without using the actual word. Very clever, and perfect.
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S I G H !
So full of emotion ... could feel the tear drops fall with each word written ... beautiful in its simplicity ... creates the desire in the reader to envelope the writer in arms safe from harm.
Superb penmanship my dear friend,
Sammy
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this is simply perfect and ironically - so very close to how my days have felt lately. thanks for being able to put into words what I can't possibly begin to describe.
it's a poem as full of imagery as it is with meaning - that is not easy to accomplish, but you make it appear easy with your writing...
- Kimmie
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The field blooms and then it fades, there is a cycle to all things. What a pretty picture these words paint.
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Beautiful, Nicolette.
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Absolutely gorgeous, to aliterate a vase to the beauty found in a morning, I see we were on the same wavelength in this contest, I just loe waking to a new day
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ah, yes...this is gorgeous in its sadness while it celebrates the beauty of what has been and remains in memory
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Outstanding,you make the vase almost inconsequential by describing it as merely glass,then you infuse it with the most beautiful of things,the dawn,loved that,adding a myriad colours,scents,freshness and naturalness to overflowing and finally gift wrap the piece with the enormity of radiance that the heart is capable of feeling,the flowering to overflowing,all within such a tightly knit piece,my dear,if this piece was material and not poetry the fashion designers would beg you to let them parade their models in it to enhance them,simply beautiful but nothing simple about it,a delight to read,love and light,Yvette
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a wonderful piece ... yes more colours than any pallet could hold.
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Sighhh...Me, too, Sweetie...What a lovely penning, my dear Friend...Good luck in Al's contest...
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