These raggedy hipbones won’t hold up these pants
Baggy and faded, there isn’t a chance
[[[of
me
and
you
ever
fitting
together]]]
Cracked, aged lips and a heart of ebony-black
They’re so hard to repair, I’ll never change back
***to
who
I
once
was***
♥
.
.
.
.
♥
You’ll never find me amongst those preppies spoutin’ country anthems
And you’ll surely never see me entwined with opera~phantoms
I do my own thing
Of my own accord I ring
-(.ring.ring.ring. my bell)-
*♥*
Please tell me what you think
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b.e.a.u.t.i.f.u.l
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Awh suga! This was amazing!All of it was just like woah.... do my own thing
Of my own accord I ring
-(.ring.ring.ring. my bell)-
I really liked that part.
xoxo,
Your Dumpster doll
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You really have a way with words <3
you amaze me
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"-(.ring.ring.ring. my bell)-"
haha I love that song and loved how you used that in your poem, it fit perfectly!
I liked the over all message of this poem about you being yourself and that if somebody wants you this is what they get. niiiiiiiiice
lovely poem babe
xxx
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This was really unique, just like you baby, my favorite line was:
And you’ll surely never see me entwined with opera~phantoms
kinda reminded me of the typical 'drama geek' cliche everyone expects people who are different to slot into,
great piece *mwah*
xxxx
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BB DOLL ♥♥♥
baby, you sure do amaze me,,
This is teriffic,
Killer form beingingin to end!!
"These raggedy hipbones won’t hold up these pants
Baggy and faded, there isn’t a chance
[[[of
me
and
you
ever
fitting
together]]]"
daymn baby, doll, just keep the ounches rolling!
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You can ring my bell anytime...
These raggedy hipbones won’t hold up these pants
Baggy and faded, there isn’t a chance
[[[of
me
and
you
ever
fitting
together]]]
i hearts this part..
ALSO-
very nice musical devices here..
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Cracked, aged lips and a heart of ebony-black
They’re so hard to repair, I’ll never change back
i love the flow of this poem.
it's very well written
*squee*
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i love this poem!
":I do my own thing
Of my own accord I ring"
perfect line!
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[[[of
me
and
you
ever
fitting
together]]]
i love this.
so broken && so beautiful.
[tragedy in the stars]
♥
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love the flow of this one.
You’ll never find me amongst those preppies spoutin’ country anthems
And you’ll surely never see me entwined with opera~phantoms
I do my own thing
Of my own accord I ring
-(.ring.ring.ring. my bell)-
good job hunny. -
i loved this poem its awesome, i loved
Cracked, aged lips and a heart of ebony-black
They’re so hard to repair, I’ll never change back
***to
who
I
once
was***
its an awesome part of your poem and made the whole poem just even better than it already is. Keep penning
~Ashley~<3 -
That's awesome.
It's obvious you're true to who you are,
and you're proud of it.
I love the poem...I love the flow to it as well.
Cracked, aged lips and a heart of ebony-black
They’re so hard to repair, I’ll never change back
***to
who
I
once
was***
Those are my favorite lines. Nice Write**
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