While mystic wind murmurs in one accord,
a whisper soft kisses the empty air.
To starry heavens my loneliness soared,
while mystic wind murmurs in one accord.
With abandoned dreams I now move toward
an uncertain time of fear and despair.
While mystic wind murmurs in one accord,
a whisper soft kisses the empty air.
'Neath star laden sky one thought does remain,
residing in me midst earth's woeful cry.
Our passionate love which heart does sustain,
'neath star laden sky one thought does remain.
Our brushing of lips leaves permanent stain,
even though hopes and dreams have gone awry.
'Neath star laden sky one thought does remain,
residing in me midst earth's woeful cry.
In a list
A contest entry
- A Macandrew Triolet contest by macandrew.
375 points, ended April 18, 2007, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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The only thing I can think of is this is a very beautiful and well written poem.
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ah sweet love, a good interpretation of the artwork here in a good form, there are only a few people really that dive into this form with passion.
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This was very well written. The 2nd and 3rd readings were much smoother and more enjoyable.
Thanks for entering.
John -
The master has displayed another wonderful work of art! Filled with lovely imagery and romance. Your brilliance shines in this poem.
Good luck in the contest my friend.
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Ahhhh YES indeed Beautiful
A lovely Triolet my friend. How utterly delightful. I just loved the warm soft feel to this most beautiful piece. Well done. I stand in applause!
Bravo! ~Pamela 
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Great
I really love the romantic side this brings out in me. I find it hard not to imagine peace and love when I read this. Good luck in the contest! -
While mystic wind murmurs in one accord,
a whisper soft kisses the empty air.
Love that refrain. An excellent triolet.
Talia -
This is such a lovely triolet in a double-feature presentation. Best of luck to you in the contest. It ranks high on the list for me. ♥ Belle
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This is beautiful, it just flows so nicely. I always say I'm going to attempt one of these forms, but I doubt I could pull it off as well as you do!
Great work!
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*deep sigh* The beauty in this is incredible, and I ask myself why I haven't read your writing before...hmmm... Beautifully penned.
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Kiran this is a lovely poem you wrote here dear friend. Well done and good luck in the contest
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Our brushing of lips leaves permanent stain,
This is an excellent triolet and the above line is AWESOME! Good luck to you!
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This is so poignant and pretty... I just love the rhythm and beauty of it. Excellent piece. Write on, poet.
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bravo
A wonderful and deftly executed triolet! bravo...bravo...bravo...
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