Toxic angel hides her face
because toxic angel crys today
toxic angel wants to be free
to fly away and spread her wings
but toxic angel has no hope
so instead she pleads to die and choke
toxic angel bleeds today as the love of her death walks away
broken and hurt she trys to fly
but falls down ,and catchs his eye
toxic angel loves him so
but love of death doesnt know
as she kisses him on the cheek
he feels the posion sinking deep
and drops the toxic angel down
as he realizes she will drown
hes saving the world from her pain
hes giving them light to a new day
but toxic angel holds his heart
and begs forgivness from the start
he looks down to her pittiful face
and says "you give me light in my new day"
he lifts her up and sets her free
now toxic angel spreads her wings
love of death holds her close
and toxic angel prays not to choke...
Author notes
i wrote this from the top of my head ...and after reading it i think its about me and my boyfriend....we have been through alot and in the end we are always together ... i love him oh so much!!
CONTEST:
option 1
"I pretty much hate you too."
A contest entry
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350 points, ended April 26, 2007, 11 entries
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deep, but i think you use the term "toxic angel" a bit too much, i feel like it's worn out by the end. you have a few typos, you may want to run this through spell check. its semi-cliche, but the feelings are tangible and many people could relate to this. no idea how this relates to the theme of the contest, if you saw the hitler picture or anything thank you for entering,
<3cassidy -
This was nicely written. Very deep. Good luck
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Wow I love this, really deep. Makes me think of me & my ex, cept we had no chance in hell of working out. My favorite lines, "hes saving the world from her pain/ hes giving them light to a new day" Awesome write.
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i like this alot and i understand it alot cause i have went through something similiar i just dont know exactly where to take if you know what i mean anyway later
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i really like this one it is good. I can really feel the emotion through out the whole thing.
Thanks for entering the contest i am sure you will do well -
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Baby Girl,
This is an absolute Beautiful poem....this is my favorite by far!!!!!
"he lifts her up and sets her free
now toxic angel spreads her wings
love of death holds her close"
thats an amazing line......I love you
♥Ashley Rene`♥
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very well written
a good way to look at a person who loves death and wants to die
but i must say you might want to edit it a little
there is just a couple of errors but nothing big
you just ned to read it over a nd correct it
other then that there is nothing that displeases me
like i said its well written
well good job
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