In this rain of tears that fall -
In my ego, proud and tall . .
In the shadow of my insanity
There has been an eternity . .
In the labyrinth of my mind -
In the answers I could not find . .
In the sorrows that lived in me
There has been an eternity . .
In the secrets that I hide -
In this innocence that I abide . .
In the moments I've felt so lonely
There has been an eternity . .
In the faces that still haunt me
In the lines that I did not see
In the moments of pure ecstacy -
There has been an eternity
In the long hours of wait -
In my love and in my hate . .
In everything that I will ever see
There will be an eternity
In rain that falls on the ground
In the pain that does not make a sound -
In silence running in my veins so free -
There will always be an eternity . .
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Author notes
Lonely
A contest entry
- For Those On My Favorites List by LadyUnique.
450 points, ended April 18, 2007, 8 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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A great write. Congratulations on the HM. Although, I must say, you deserved so much more for this piece!
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Enjoyable poem here Lonely. I like the fractured rhyming and how it fits with the darkness of the poem. Funny, but there also has a sense of peace in the writing, maybe it's just a quality of acceptance of feelings at the time. It's not basted in anger... more a seemingly calm acceptance.
Congrats on the HM.
Best Wishes -Emmjay
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Wow, this is an excellent poem with a seamless dimension of rhyming rhythm...the longing emotions and the colourful rainbow of this poem is also seamless...breathtaking imagery...
My favourite lines:
In rain that falls on the ground
In the pain that does not make a sound -
In silence running in my veins so free -
There will always be an eternity . .
thank you for creating and sharing such a lovely and emotional poem...take care and all the very best...
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'in the pain that does not make a sound' is just so damn sad... and true
i simply loved this
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I love this!
Wow... when I finished reading this and when back to see who it was that wrote this... ouch! It's an awesome write... so tender... truthful... touching... blah, blah, blah (I hope the blah's didn't diminish my sincerity... they weren't meant to).
You captured that feeling of longing... where one waits not so much in despair and hopelessness but in acceptance. You have come to terms with your solitary niche. The flow is flawless. The words haunting at times... I do hope you are not too lonely. It's a terrible thing. Keep writing, you have a gift to share.
I will read as I am able.
Kj
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Lovely piece! I love the smooth and even flow that lasted throughout the poem. The word choice was simple, but still managed to convey emotion. I fel an overall calming effect, personally. Very nicely written, and best of luck in the contest!
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God...this is AMAZING! Heartfelt, beautiful and emotional. I wish you the best of luck in the contest!
Keep writing and God Bless
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would you please put your name in author comments for me? thank you
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Lonely? I did
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