They shall have their freedom.
They can nail men of god’s seed
To planks from the ignorant tree,
And ride on their cries.
But their characters shall hammer through the ages,
And their cries shall be the light,
That lights up the skies
Where no light breaks.
With the stars on their right hand,
They shall have their freedom.
They shall have their freedom.
They can shackle the arms of the sun’s child,
And send him to his tortured doom,
(A watery grave or a cattle’s life)
But the shackles can not hold his soul,
And his life of doom shall not be in vain,
For his children will have his strife,
Seeded in their brains.
With the seeds grown,
And the sun’s child on their shoulders.
They shall have their freedom.
They shall have their freedom.
They can strip sacred shapes from their bodies,
And be their Shepherds,
Herding them off the maps of minds,
To forgotten pens.
But they can not shepherd the birds,
That ticks in their minds and hearts.
For they shall rise and shout from the stars,
With the king himself.
“Free at last, free at last. Thank god we are free at last.”
A contest entry
- Your Very Best #2 (pre-writes allowed) by Dark Whispers.
415 points, ended April 18, 2007, 38 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Anything that has good rhyme!(pre-writes allowed) by ExpectingMommy18.
650 points, ended October 25, 2007, 73 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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i think its a good thing you wrote this poem. you did a wonderful job expressing how you feel about this!
thank you for entering and good luck in the contest
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the flow in this poem was eceptional, you did a great job, thanks for entering in my contest.
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this has a very nice flow to it. It is almost song like. I like the way it reads. It doesnt have any cut and dried rhyme scheme but I really did not notice that until after I had finished reading it. It is nice when rhyme or the lack of it does not stand out in front of the poem itself.
I like some of the plays on words that you use, for instance in the next to the last line with the word king.
It was a very enjoyable read and a very strong reminder of things that need remembering
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