Covered in stickers from places i'd been,
And battered and bruised like a pear,
The suitcase brought back great memories,
As it sat at the top of the stair,
Used on so many occasions,
From weddings to weekends away,
Trips that i'd had with the family,
When we'd journey for many a day,
It had travelled the world like a Phileas Fogg,
But not quite in eighty days,
And had been to some places i'd never seen,
But that was down to British Airways,
There was only one trip left to make now,
With its locks and its sheen all but done,
A trip to the suitcases heaven,
Where i prayed it would still give some fun.
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Hehehe, I thought i'd read all your poems, Kenny, obviously not, you've done well to get all this from an old suitcase, hehe, well done!
good stuff,
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this is great I can relate to the 1st stanza very much lovely flow throughout enjoyable read.
take-care
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On a wing and a prayer
Brilliantly original my friend. Loved it.Loved the flow and rhym and the great sentimantal feelings that were interwoven ... on a suitcase .. great work
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Ah he's back!!! Woohoo!! Hallelujah! About time that talented pen got to writing again. I hope with the retiring of your suitcase, you will stay with us a while! Very enjoyable write as usual.
Jeannie
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excellent
Very cute write, I have one of those suitcases but I am not ready to retire it just yet. Still have a few places to see under Heaven. Enjoyable read.
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very funny
kenny nice to see something new from you this is written very well rhyme and flow were execellent such a pleasure to read your poetry as always your friend mary take care love ya
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WONDERFUL!!!
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Entertaining!
What a great tribute to the memories of lifes journeys! Very well done - the rhyme scheme works well and the meter is consistent - good easy rhythm. I hope the suitcase enjoyed the adventures!
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Lovely
great poem!!! I really enjoy it! Keep on writting!! I loved the flow and the rhythm that was in this poem!! take care and have a great day!
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Funny & Reflective
Lols. While this was very funny it also got me thinking about some of those very little things which get pushed into a corner, or on top of a cupboard, only to be dragged out when that moment of necessity arises... in this case travelling, even just to the local market to sell some wares
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The poem itself has great flow, rhythm and rhyme. Wonderfully vivid and just overall a real feel-good of a write.
Well Done!
Wishes -Emmjay
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when all gone only memories linger behind-well done
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Very good work, lots of terrific memories with a hopefull yet sort of sad ending. I liked it alot however I just can't get this line to flow "And battered and bruised like a pear," I don't like the first And it stops the flow and chokes the line.
Overall great Job.
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Kenny,
What a great read this one is!! It is kinda sad when we are forced to retire something that has soooo much history, been to sooo many places with us, and been such a faithful companion on lifes highway!
What a great job you have done on this one my friend!! I love it! Thanks for sharing!! Keep that pen flowing.
Loves ya
Nyetta
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Great Rhyme
I love rhyming poems. Something you do not see much of on here. A poem filled with travel & hopes. Fine work
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oh another Kenny write.lmao the destiny of airlines and all those bags that get lostor go off on a holiday without their owners and for the owner left stranded in just the clothes on their backs while they bags have fun foraming the world. Kenny you words flow and fill the space with imagery Ah that suitcase heaven in the sky where all good suitcases go battered and bruised they now can relax and laugh when the next bag goes astray.Nice one Kenny a pleasure
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Aw what a great poem! Really evocative and so true. Love the humour re BA. Thanks for sharing this lovely poem.
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This is such a lovely poem. I could almost say a wonderful tribute to your suitcase! And the last two lines were great. There are so many things people write about, but this was the first suitcase poem, and i truly enjoyed it. well done.
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