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Destined Fate

Screeching tires fade
The world in slow motion
Innocence as flames

Author notes

fate was wrong in taking him

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  • Weetzie bat
    April 11, 2007
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    sad but nicely writen.
    beautiful


  • Lady-Pegasus
    April 11, 2007
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    Well, this is a powerful piece, although more a senryu than haiku, and the title is off for the rule sof those as well. THe show v tell is certainly there though and the second line is short a syllable. Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors. Hetohke'e *


  • Harrisham Minhas
    April 11, 2007

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    A sad Haiku. Nicely done.

    Thanks for your entry. Good luck in my contest.

    Be Serene,
    Spread Peace,

    Harrisham Minhas.