Guilt
Chips of guilt
Settle painfully
In my stomach
(original of course...
I needed the salt fix)
If I bake them in an oven of worry's heat,
will they turn to poison this time?
Or will they become a source of crippling
till I find a gun of blame
for shooting myself in the foot?
Swallowed appetizers of self-hate are such misery,
only if I eat them enough will I feel my conscience
stop hammering at my esteem
producing more chips?
Perhaps I can stop wondering enough
so I can drink some antacid of forgiveness.
However, will I feel even worse and more worthless
for wanting to feel better?
Time for a snack of clarity and truth,
hopefully without salt,
and with some sugar of accepting, seasoned with honesty,
that sensitive stomachs will burns at times
even when you do things perfectly.
A contest entry
- Guilt ... by Polaja.
700 points, ended May 23, 2007, 19 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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A complete turn around from guilt to forgiveness, the first I've seen like this so far. Very nice. I love how you stuck to the food theme from the chips. Fantastic!
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Thank you for the great comment.
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Great double meaning
My favourite bit of language in here was the use of 'chip' for snack and for damage. Fantastic- a really good balance of emotion and technique.
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Thank you for the wonderful comment.
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Excellent Job
It was very poignant and well worded. The gun of blame was very clever. And you carried the theme out well from beginning to end. Great job!
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Thank you for the great comment.
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Wow-
- it took me three times to post -
Magnificent piece You have penned Sweetness
Powerful message shared!
Loved this verse~~
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Perhaps I can stop wondering enough
so I can drink some antacid of forgiveness.
However, will I feel even worse and more worthless
for wanting to feel better?
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Powerful stanza...
The entire piece is but these lines grabbed...
Thank You for sharing Your Talent!!
Best wishes to You in the contest
Many blessings too
and my Love
~ Desire~*~
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Thank you darling. Can never have enough antacid can we?
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