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Sore Shoulders

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My head hurts

 

in a numb uncumbersome kind of way

that masks the restlessness in my bones

and the fear of freezing in place

without having changed

the diaper

that holds this shit together

 

I wish I could feel a sharp pain

and not this vague ache

shaking me to the marrow

and sucking on my bones

already over-run with ants

boring holes through the chalky dirt

of what I used to call my virtue

 

I want to go

I want to go

I want to go

 

somewhere where I can breathe

without the heartburn

 

 

~~~~~

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  • Junebug-
    April 19, 2007

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    I am on it now....

    I hate it when Aunt Flow unpacks her bags!!!

    I love this poem. I love the symbolism and the inspiration. It is like a double edged sore with two meanings.

    I really like this one.


  • Heart Sutra
    April 15, 2007

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    The metaphors show a lot of through just a handful of words. Great work! The rag blues can really get to us all, can't they?


  • misselaineous
    April 11, 2007

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    ouch
    as i have been suffering of late from a very sore neck and shoulders i can relate to your clever use of imagery and that plea for solace and peace
    well done
    elaine


  • Night Hope gold member
    April 10, 2007
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    "somewhere where I can breathe
    without the heartburn"

    Poor Baby...I hear ya, my Friend...When you find that place, send me directions, will ya??? I've been lookin' for it for awhile now myself...A grand display of displeasure & discomfort, Lady...Good luck in the contest, Sweetie... Wander Lea


  • Peteskid gold member
    April 10, 2007

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    very well done

    the writing is very good the use of image and metaphor is effective and the forgetting is a plea for release to a less burdened world; the reader feels the reasons for the plea. This is a very skillful writing using few well chosen words to deliver a message and some viewpoints... very well done. Thank you for this fine entry in the contest and best of luck to you in the judging...PK

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