I want to wright it all down so you can understand :
I want to give you my hole heart in one hand.
There's so many things that make you great
Im now starting to think it had to be fate.
I love so many thing about you,
Like your wacky hair-do.
I love the way you walk and talk,
The way i smile when you're around,
How one of your jokes makes me fall to the ground.
How you think you're in a kick-ass band,
But the truth is you're your only fan,
The thing i love the least is how you love her and not me.
I can still remember they day that i said ok,
But then things changed and are love broke into pieces that flew away.
It's hard to sit and watch you with her.
In my one hand, my heart
In the other the hopes of having yours...
Please tell me what you think
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I want to [Write] it all down so you can understand[:]
I want to give you my hole heart in one hand[.]
[There's] so many thing[s] that make you great
Im [now] starting to think it had to be fate[.]
I love so many thing about you[,]
Like your wacky [hair-do][.]
I love the way you walk and talk[,]
The way i smile when [you're] around[,]
How one of your jokes makes me fall to the ground[.]
How you think [you're] in a [kick-ass] band[,]
But the truth is [you're] your only fan[,]
The thing i love the [least] is how you love her and not me[.]
I can still remember they day that i said ok[,]
But then things changed and are love [broke] into pieces that flew away[.]
[It's] hard to [sit] and watch you with her[.]
In my one hand[,] my heart
[In the other,] the hopes of having yours...
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great idea it is so deep and thoughtful!
Great write =]
~WU
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I LOVE AMBY AND YOU WILL GET HIM!!!!!! GREAT POEM GIRL!!
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this is amazing and so uterly true
hahah
i love youu
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