The silence
visiting like a haunting banshee
burns from the crippling knowing
no one is there to hear your heartbeat
when tears flow without another hand to care
and all the world feels like strangers.
It is to be swallowed in a hole
where this isn't the light of love
shining on tomorrow
that will show
any companion's arm waiting
for giving a single hug or embrace
which shouts
somebody knows your name.
Most of all,
comes that image of a deserted grave
with a marker having your name,
lacking even one flower of grief or mourners
to remember you ever lived.
Drowning in a social cesspool
of an outcast's toxic waste
is never solitude's haven
as much as solitary confinement.
A contest entry
- Alone.....Prewrites allowed by LoveNeverDies.
370 points, ended May 17, 2007, 93 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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oh wow! this was an amzingly written piece. the structure mad it have a beat to it as I read and I loved your choice of word it left me in a total state od awe....
keep it up
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Thank you for the wonderful comment. It was so thoughtful.
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oh wow.!!!! this was a wickd write...your words were powerful strong and emotional as well..this was such a powerful write and amazing! you are very talented keep writting and good luck in the contest
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Thank you so much for the wonderful comment. Being alone can be so tough on anyone.
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Oh My!!
This is so sad
~*~
Most of all,
comes that image of a deserted grave
with a marker having your name,
lacking even one flower of grief or mourners
to remember you ever lived.
~*~
Powerful piece Sweetness
Lots of emotion~~
Best wishes to You in the contest
Many blessings too
and my Love
~ Desire~*~
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Thank you sweetness. Sad, but loneliness is like that isn't it?
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wow thats all i can say wow great great great emotion it was terrific thank you soooooo much for entering you did a really great job on this write... and ofcourse.. i love the picture it adds soooo much to the meaning of the poem great great great great work
thanks for entering
issy -
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Thank you so much for your great comment. And for providing the wonderful picture.
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