my heart melts
like a puddle
of vanilla ice cream
i left to sink
into the front yard
white tennis shoes
sport yellow brown bruises
from scuffles in sidewalks
fenced backyards, and
hikes up to McAvery's farm
where dandelions
peep under my skirt
the dry days
walk by on snail legs;
water pools in the tub
where an arm hangs out-
elbows dark points
in slender, bronzed arms
that fled to this cool
white-tiled world
to banish the day's sting
I reach out blindly
in this sun-baked world
for blue-tinted sunglasses;
oh joy! skipping to the laundromat,
passing old Jim's Alley
where we spent time
bowling, and rolling tongues
around parched caverns-
the lazy taverns
where the only commodity served
are words fit
to hang dry
on summer clotheslines.
Author notes
The heat in my place is unbearable...it's like living in an oven.. I really wonder about global warming now, and all these freaky changes happening to the weather in general. This piece is for the old memories of summers gone by in my childhood, when I was young and innocent enough to think that summer days would last forever.
A contest entry
- barbeques, flings and oh, those summer nights by Annalise.
360 points, ended May 5, 2007, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
I hope your summer's better than mine. Do please comment on this poem. Thank you!
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where dandelions
peep under my skirt
what a clever way to describe it...
I like this one...It makes you feel carefree and easy
but it gives you a doze of sunshine to smile about the old times...
Thank you for sharing this -
"where dandelions
peep under my skirt"
I love that. I do wonder if perhaps it would be more accurate to say the dandelions peep "up" your skirt?
I enjoyed this poem. Good imagery here... good word choices. The only thing I can see is the last stanza seemed to drift away from the rest of the piece. At least the first three lines, which has more description than imagery. The last lines swing it back in to end this properly, though.
All in all... this is a good piece. One I truly enjoyed reading.
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This screams summer through every word. Everyone's summer experiences are different, but I think the childlike feeling of warm grass and sunburns lasting for all times is a universal feeling. Good luck in this contest!
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This is quite good.
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Thank you. I think it needs some improvements though... but I will just have to make the changes when the contest is over... the theme just spurred me to write...and i did it with too much haste and not much thinking, apparently... (sorry Annalise!)
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