When out divided panes of glass I stare
in need of breath to heal my lonely heart
I whisper quietly with tender care,
when out divided panes of glass I stare.
Oh how I yearn to see you standing there
with open arms to build a brand new start.
When out divided panes of glass I stare
in need of breath to heal my lonely heart.
With dust upon the glass as years go by
the thought of you is fading with the time.
My whisper now becomes a tender sigh
with dust upon the glass as years go by.
For were our moments passed, a lover's lie;
a story played to passion in our prime?
With dust upon the glass as years go by,
the thought of you is fading with the time.
In a list
A contest entry
- A Macandrew Triolet contest by macandrew.
375 points, ended April 18, 2007, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Thanks for showing me how these are done, Pamela, with this beautiful example. I didn't realize it was a double one as I had only attempted one once before and had forgotten what they are but I know i can depend on you to demonstrate most forms so nicely, so your list was the first place I looked.
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a great piece, not so many poets i think playing with this form, a certain few and that is it. which is a shame cos it is such a great form this for love especially.
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individuality
Thank you for such kind words and for introducing me to the Triolet to begin with Ian. I agree. We don't see enough of this form.
~Pamela 
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This is fantastic! Very well done. An emotional Triolet. It flows smoothly and effortlessly.
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Harrisham Minhas
Thank you so much for your kind words on my Triolet. I am pleased you enjoyed it. I love this form for its effective use of repetition. So pleased you enjoyed . Thank you again. ~Pamela
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Superb
I've never really appreciated Triolets in the past until I read this lovely pair you have created. Our very talented friend Eusebius has been trying his hand at Triolets of late as well, so perhaps I'll have a crack at a couple myself, though I'm sure they won't match up to yours I'm afraid. These Triolets are truly wonderful indeed. Congratulations on winning the gold trophy, you are more than deserving.
All the best,
David Michaels
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David Michaels
Thank you so much. Again, repetition can be very effective making the triolet beautiful. I am so pleased you enjoyed this piece. You definitely must check Michael's triolets and certainly do some of your own. He does a wonderful job with them and I am certain you will too. Let me know, I will be interested in reading. Thank you again for your most courteous and encouraging comments. I appreciate them very much. ~Pamela
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It is always a pleasure to read a well written and poignant Triolet.I enjoy reading and wrting various poetry forms, the Triolet a favorite.Congatulations for the well deserved Gold Trophy
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Billbard
Thank you so much for your kind words on this Triolet. It is a form that I love as well. I am very pleased for your comment here. Thank you. ~Pamela
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Indeed a great read! Loved the refrains, they make each stanza read and flow smoothly.
Congratulations
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Excellent use of the form. I love the image and the flow. This is great. Three bunnies.
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MariGoes
Thank you so much for your kind words on my Triolet. I appreciate them so much. ~Pamela
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PerVirtuous Alllan
Thank you so much for taking a moment to stop and leave your comments on my poem. I appreciate it very much. Thank you. ~Pamela
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i loved this.. this is great i really enjoyed this...great..awesome write
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DepressedAngel
Thank you so much for taking a moment to stop by and leave your comments. I appreciate it very much. ~Pamela
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My favorite in the contest. Shortly this will be adorned in gold.
A lovely read.
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John
I am thrilled that you felt my triolet deserved a trophy let alone gold. From you it is quite the recognition and I am so pleased. Thank you so much. ~Pamela
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VEry nice Triolet Pamela, this had a real nice flow to it and is musical in the way it reads. Could be made into lyrics. Nice write, keep them coming. Good luck in the contest and thanks for sharing.
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CK
Thank you so much for your most kind words on my Triolet. I am very pleased that you enjoyed this piece. ~Pamela
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Ahhh, I loved this, I found it wrenching emotions from me that I was not sure that I had. This was a wonderful, beautiful write.. Great luck to you in the contest
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True2myHeart
Thank you so much for your most kind words on my triolet. I am so pleased you enjoyed it. Thank you. ~Pamela
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My whisper now becomes a tender sigh
A beautifully written triolet.
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Isalie
Thank you so much for your kind words on my Triolet. I am so pleased you enjoyed this piece. Thank you. ~Pamela
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Bravo!!
Oh, soooo very excellent! One of he best triolets I've read! I loved this, everything worked to perfection in this, absolutely perfection. I would not change a single word or it! Bravo!!! Bravo!!! Bravo!!!
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Eusebius
Michael, I am so pleased you enjoyed my Triolet and coming from you, this means a great deal. Thank you so much my friend. ~Pamela
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Great write
Pamela: your usual creative lovely write and an incredibl triolet. Loved it..
Lady D
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Lady D
Thank you so much for your kind words on my Triolet. I am so pleased you enjoyed this piece. I love this form for its repetition which I find so effective. Thank you again. ~Pamela
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Excellent! Beautiful triolet you have penned here... I am in awe by the excellent flow and rhythm of your piece. Write on, poet.
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Mythress
Thank you so much for your kind words on my poem. I appreciate it so much. ~Pamela
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Breathtaking! Such an outstanding piece you have penned here! This flows so well and the imagery is marvellous! All the best in this contest you've entered!
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Kiran
Thank you for your kind words. I am so pleased you enjoyed this piece. ~Pamela
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Pure Excellence
Wow, you really do make these triolets sing without any feel of repetition. I too felt as though I was looking out this window.
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oh...speechless again...you did it AGAIN! I am amazed. This is awesome....nothing else to say...just AWESOME!
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Ken
Thank you so much. I love a triolet and am so pleased you enjoyed this one. Thank you again. ~Pamela 
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going nowhere
Thank you so much for your kind words on my Triolet. I am so pleased you enjoyed it. I love this form. ~Pamela
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Wonderful triolet, but more importantly wonderful poem,
I felt like I was in the picture looking out the window with all of these thoughts going through my head,
Oh how you made me feel it.
Thanks for sharing,
Love and Light
Frozentearz
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Frozentearz
Thank you so much my friend. I am so pleased you enjoyed this piece. ~Pamela
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