It was many and many a year ago,
In a kingdom by the sea,
That my heartbeat began to soften and slow
At the thought of you loving me;--
And somehow I hadn't a care in the world
Except for us to be free.
You were a boy and I was a girl
In our kingdom by the sea,
The thought of it all was a beautiful pearl
A lustrous thing to forsee--
And I knew that you loved with all of your heart
A girl that could only be me.
Now you and your love are all that is left
Your love, of course, and me
And all of that willing was never bereft
For now we are finally free--
Today, by the seashore, I told of my love
I shouted my love to the sea
Shouted my rapture to heaven above
So that all of the angels could see.
Now that the angels have heard of my care,
A care that could only decree
My undying love for mon attrayant cher
And the love he has given to me--
My life is now perfect, I must confess,
Thanks to the love and the sea.
Our love is too strong for the angels to steal
In the midst of their jealousy-
For what is between you and me--
It's something that has and will always be real
As real as the sun and the sea,
And tonight you'll confess your love as I have
In order to set yourself free.
And the mix of our love soars to heaven above
For all of eternity,
And I'll always love you, whatever you do
For all of eternity,
I'll be here forever, nobody can sever
The ties that eternally hold us together
In our kingdom by the sea--
In our love beside the sea.
Author notes
Option 4 - Love.
This poem is very special to me. It took a while to write and Poe is my absolute favorite poet, so I loved writing this in his style.
Edgar Allan Poe -- Annabel Lee. Credit of first two lines and poem style belong to Mr. Poe.
It was many and many a year ago,
In a kingdom by the sea,
That a maiden there lived whom you may know
By the name of ANNABEL LEE;--
And this maiden she lived with no other thought
Than to love and be loved by me.
She was a child and I was a child,
In this kingdom by the sea,
But we loved with a love that was more than love--
I and my Annabel Lee--
With a love that the winged seraphs of heaven
Coveted her and me.
And this was the reason that, long ago,
In this kingdom by the sea,
A wind blew out of a cloud by night
Chilling my Annabel Lee;
So that her high-born kinsman came
And bore her away from me,
To shut her up in a sepulchre
In this kingdom by the sea.
The angels, not half so happy in Heaven,
Went envying her and me:--
Yes! that was the reason (as all men know,
In this kingdom by the sea)
That the wind came out of a cloud, chilling
And killing my Annabel Lee.
But our love it was stronger by far than the love
Of those who were older than we--
Of many far wiser than we-
And neither the angels in Heaven above,
Nor the demons down under the sea,
Can ever dissever my soul from the soul
Of the beautiful Annabel Lee:--
For the moon never beams without bringing me dreams
Of the beautiful Annabel Lee;
And the stars never rise but I see the bright eyes
Of the beautiful Annabel Lee;
And so, all the night-tide, I lie down by the side
Of my darling, my darling, my life and my bride,
In her sepulchre there by the sea--
In her tomb by the side of the sea.
A contest entry
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From your author's notes, I take it that you don't consider the poem bad. I must ask...why did you enter my contest? Just a question. -
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Honestly? I'm really undecided on this poem. At first I considered it my best because I put a lot of time and work and thought into it.
But I did come to realize that the worst way to write a poem is to think while writing it, which is exactly what I did for every single line in this poem.
So yes, I like it. But I also believe it is my worst poem and dislike it because of the fact I added thought into my writing process.
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Wow! You must get a prize for having enetered this poem into more contests than any other poem ever in the history of Allpoetry!
I found the repeated line endings rhyming with "me" irritating but I suppose that is intentional. -
Poe is My favorite Good Luck in the Contest
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this is a great write! the rhyming is amazing and def. not forced. keep up the great writes and good luck in the contest!
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and intresting and wonderful poem on love.
many emotions could be felt in this
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i like this... you did a good job capturing a really difficult style
thanks for entering
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Interesting poem which was quite romantic. This was a good poem, its Victorian feel was quite clear here.
Thanks for your comment. What are the flowers? I was going to name them (not sure if that would constitute better wording) but I didn't know
Pozo
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Poe's Annabel Lee happens to be a favorite of mine, as well. And while I can understand your desire to emulate him, I felt like this was more a copy of his poem in your words instead of your own ideas. Many of the themes are similar. However, outside of that, your poem did carry nice images throughout. In the last two stanzas the rhythm seemed to stumble a little, so I suggest taking another look to see if some adjustment can be made to make it flow smoothly. I think you did well with the rhyming. Thanks for your entry.
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Hm. I do see what you're saying with my copying his ideas, but it's really not like that at all. I really tried to keep the rhyme scheme and yes, the ideas are similar, but I was using his poem for inspiration. Some themes were bound to be alike.
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Great poem. Good luck.
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fabulous!!!
Now this was a fantastic write!!! Poe is also one of my favorites, and to have someone that has actually been able to capture his 'voice', I get shivers!!!
This poem flows so nicely, and the rhyme is excellent as well!
What I like about this poem... I love the melodic flow of it... I like that you were able to take Poe's form and bring it around. You didn't lose any of the sparkle of the original poem... but yet your meaning and his meaning is completely different. Your poem is uplifting, hopeful... while his is, of course, not. But still...you used his style... but I felt you made it your own. You didn't try to remake Annabel Lee.... you just gained your inspiration from it. Well done!!
Now normally, I would mention the cliche'd words and lines that you used in this poem... and there are some. And usually, seeing those overused lines, and cliches would get my hackles up... and would distract me from the overall beauty of a poem... however... I realize that it would have been extremely difficult to keep up with the style of Poe's writing without those cliches and overused lines.
Still... just on general principles... lines like 'a lustrous thing to see', 'for all of eternity' 'I told of my love' - these have all been used to death... and while here they work well, because of the style and format you used.... I hope you don't fall into their trap!
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I've been asked to ask you if could you please make sure your user name is in your author notes Thanks. Good luck in the contest
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this poem was gret esspecially this stanza "You were a boy and I was a girl
In our kingdom by the sea,
The thought of it all was a beautiful pearl
A lustrous thing to forsee--
And I knew that you loved with all of your heart"
I think you are using the word 'sea/' too much -
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I used the word 'sea' seven times. I was trying to keep with Poe's style as much as I could while still being creative. Poe used 'sea' eight times.
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Sorry I posted like, way too many comments... of the same comment... My computer isn't being nice today.
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I love Poe. ^__^ I can definitely tell thats where your inspiration came from, even if you said it in your author's note... Thank you for entering my contest.
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I love Poe. ^__^ I can definitely tell thats where your inspiration came from, even if you said it in your author's note... Thank you for entering my contest.
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I love Poe. ^__^ I can definitely tell thats where your inspiration came from, even if you said it in your author's note... Thank you for entering my contest.
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Yeah!!!! I love Anna bell Lee, even if it is a bit creepy in the context of Poe's life. Great job - this is going in the book!!!!
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Thanks, doll. This is my baby, I love it. It took me damn near forever to write, too.
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your flow has changed; it's perfect now...even with inspiration from Poe.
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