I like to catch water in my hands.
Running water, raining water,
Soapy water, staining water,
Falling into my hands.
It's peaceful.
I like to listen to the rain fall.
It hits my window, hits my roof,
Makes my dog sit up and woof.
When the rain falls,
Empty and serene and peaceful.
You can hear things in water,
If you listen close enough.
I don't mean drip drop, pitter potter,
I mean real profound stuff!
I hear words. Verses. Haiku.
Whole epics do I hear, I swear to you.
A faucet told me a joke once,
It was hilarious.
And a toilet recited Dante,
I'm serious!
A bathtubs opinion on gay marriage
Made me furious,
And boiling water pens poems
Quite murderous.
Waterbeds have quite the story to tell.
And holy water babbles on constantly about Hell.
But rain, rain is different from the rest.
Rain is very selective about what it says.
Rain says the least, but rain says the best.
If you listen to the rain close enough you know
That constantly, each drop whispers "Shalom."
Author notes
Shalom is Hebrew for peace. It's also a greeting. (:
A contest entry
- Anything. Just Impress Me. by I-Am-Custard.
900 points, ended April 13, 2007, 58 entries
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"And holy water babbles on--"I never hear any of that,
Ha, you must have water fever.
I loved this especially the fourth stanza, well thought out and put together, a fun and clear read.
Shalom to you too.
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Nice! It's raining here. I kow sometimes rain its self can sound different. angry, weepy or laughing.
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Very good write, humor mixed in with thoughtful phrases. I will have to listen more carefully, and see if it says the same to me. Rain does have that peace in it. I like to think of it as tears from all that have left us. Reminding us of inner peace within our selves. Thanks for sharing.
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'Holy water babbles on comnstantly about hell', that's a genius line! I'm a massive fan of poetry that gives objects a voice, and this does that quite effectively. I liked that you came back to rain only at the beginning and end, it gave a nice circularity. The colloquialisms were very nice too, and the rhythm was constant and had a good pace through-out, which is impressive in free-verse. I like this, it very nearly got a HM.
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Delightful
Week after week there is improvement
Proud to be viewing upward movement
Peace and victory have the same sign
I wish you victory in your design
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Wow, very good job. Fun, and funny, and a bit profound as well. Really liked the third stanza, and the first one had a really good beat. Though I am undecided whether to accept "woof" as a legitmate word. ;-)
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The piece was very evocative of the Water element; incorporating objects which were very much related to the elemnet. Very clearn, very concise and straight to the point, but still managed to exude a creative feel to it. I also loved the inner rhymes, and think that the whole piece flowed beautifully if not freely. Great write.
xoxo
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WOW. I have no words that are worthy of being used to tell my opinion of this peice....none of them would be good enough!! Any thing I could say to try to tell you how much I adored this poem would completely deface it's magnificence (sp?) You always amaze me!
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Lets see if I can recall this spelling corectly: Shalom Alakheem! I sit here with the rain singing a soft lulabye out my window, telling me of the soft gentle joy of motherhood I enjoy and the tender arms of my beloved Vic. Thank you for reminding me to listen and gather inspiration.
As to that tub... was it against it? If so, sledge Hammer it hehe!! Wonderful imagery here with s tone that sompliments this peasful write. Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors. Hetohke'e * -
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Shalom Aleichem is how it is spelled, but a valiant try nonetheless! As for the tub, I'll let his opinions be mysterious. (:
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thanks for the correction, i have not seen that word or phrase in so long it was a pleasure to see and now the song is running in my head. lol I usually dun like that but as it replaces another persons contribution to my thoughts of How much os that doggy in the window, I am very greatful hehe. As to the tub
grr not tellin is torture 
WAHHHH 
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This was one of the best poems I have read in a while. I loved you humor and imagery. Water speaks to me too and I read every word with avid joy. Your poem is clear, concise, easy to understand, yet full of hidden depths. Than you for sharing this with us. Peace. Liz (or should I say Shalom)
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