Add a splash of colour
to another pale array,
of a grey and dismal dawning
to a new uncluttered day;
With a dash of powered baby
and a daub of sunshine hue,
it could wake and shake
the cobwebs from the dusky cheeks of you;
So, as you wake each morning
and before the rain appears,
collect your thoughts around you
and paint all, without soft tears;
The clouds drift in as pillows,
in their creams and tinted blush,
as the sun creeps high above them
burning orange in a rush;
So, the moral to this story
is to paint the world aglow,
with the palette of pure colour
that we can, all each, bestow.
In a list
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I am liking your pieces more and more as I read them
, this shows a wonderful flow and rhyme in its thoughts and a delightful whimsical nature of deeper things we should be able to enjoy as we view the world. Thank you so much for sharing it. Love, C
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Thank you
Your comments, are always most welcome 
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Really, I'd love to be able to rhyme so freely. Mine is always forced and sounds very trite, especially when I'm trying to be all serious and "poetic" lol. The list you've put this in fits the piece perfectly, because it has that great wispy kind of feel about it that swallowed me up like a great big cotton ball. lol. I mean, seriously now... it'd be hard not to enjoy a poem like this with a feeling like that!
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Thank you Nichole, it is not often the flow comes as easily as this poem did, I normally have to work at it, but I was delighted when this one worked so well. Many thanks for your kindness, as always, very much appreciated
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This is a wonderful and inspirational poem ^_^ I like the part:
Add a splash of colour
to another pale array,
of a grey and dismal dawning
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Thank you for your kindness as always, very much appreciated
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How brilliant! I could see a radiant sunrise. There was not a scratch of forced rhyming anywhere. This was such a pleasant, serene and refreshing read. Thank you so much for sharing - we all need something like this at the start of a day!
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Thank you I am delighted that you enjoyed it
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'Add A Splash of Colour'...
the title is a lovely thought in its self..
and you have painted some nice imagry in here as well...
thank you for writting and sharing it with us all and me too....today.
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Thank you
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This was a beautiful read. I enjoy it from start to finish, no bits got boring which helped keep the imagery and creativity at hand. The flow also make it a smooth read.
Was definately more interesting than what I have read lately, so thank you. It was beautiful.
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Thank you I rather like this one myself
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beautiful! this is great. I loved the picture. keep up the incredible flow of good work. peace and light, kendal palmer
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Thank you Kendal for your kindness
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You have this poem in the 'odd' category and I don't understand why because I don't think it's odd at all. Please think about putting into a different category, maybe inspiration or something brighter and more cheerful.
This is the kind of inspiring poem that should be printed out and stuck above the kettle to read first thing in the morning, not only to chear ourselves up but to inspire us to make the most of each day. The message in this piece of writing could brighten the dullest day and the most depressed spirit.
The rhyming style and easy flow made this an enjoyable poem to read. I particularly like the image of clouds drifting in as pillows as it creates a lovely soft feeling to the start of the day.
P.S. - be sure to check out the name Raven Contest for information on the 20,000 point open event starting in June.
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Perhaps, not odd...just a little strangeI know they say that people take on the persona of their pets but I firmly think poets take on their form of writing Heaven help us...lol. Many thanks for your kind words regarding this poem, I am delighted that you enjoyed it.
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The flow and rhythm of this are really good. I like the symbolism you use and it left me a little inspired. You have a great and unique way of writing that is refreshing and far from gray!
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Thank you, delighted that you enjoyed it
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This is a very enjoyable read it has a lot of quality and character to it. The message is interesting and creative. This poem is a magnificent piece that is penned so smoothly.
~Snappy
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You are very kind and your comments are very much appreciated
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very nice Ms Cutie -- almost romantic except for my location ----- ha ---- The banjo wrote 'it' like this for here ---- http://www.uq.edu.au/~mlwham/banjo/its_grand.html (Thank you)
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I very much enjoy the Australian poet "Banjo" strikes me he had a terrific sense of humour. Glad you enjoyed it my friend
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Inspirational!
A wonderful read that creates the very thoughts you want your day to be filled within all the lovely hues when tenderly painted upon your poetic pages anew. Thanks for sharing sweet soul, much love always to you. -Timothy
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Thank you Timothy, for your kindess and support, as always, very much appreciated
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This is one wonderful whimsey. As ever, the rhyme is perfect and so easy to read.
This stanza really caught my attention:
"...The clouds drift in as pillows,
in their creams and tinted blush,
as the sun creeps high above them
burning orange in a rush;
Good luck in the contest, this is so good.
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Glad you enjoyed it Often the day needs brightening just a little
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