The source that used to fuel my laughter
Has withered away into the dust.
And while I sit here, wasting the day,
Wallowing in my misery,
My soul's lord still manages somehow to dance,
Keeping me alive although I feel dead.
I might as well be, seeing as I exist no longer
In his burning eyes
As they glance right through me.
Why is it that birds still flutter in my chest
Whenever he looks my way?
I should've freed myself a long time ago,
But still his fist is clenched around my Sun,
Extinguishing its glow.
Author notes
A poem about heartbreak, I suppose, although I have no experience with it. I saw this contest and liked it, so I decided to try to enter something. Hopefully it's sort of decent. I think it's not my best, but it's still okay. I like it. It was hard to think of other words to use to refer to my heart.
A contest entry
- Break The Cliche by Lyre-Bird-.
550 points, ended April 13, 2007, 17 entries
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that person you told me you liked when you slept over... I can't remember his name.
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I just said he was cute! I never said I liked him. He's annoying as hell. But how would he be breaking my heart, anyway? No guy's ever broken my heart... And plus I said in the author's notes, "I have no experience with it." You confuse me.
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Firstly I want to thank you for entering the contest and following all the rules........
Your entry has been added to the finals list!!!!!
wish you the best of luck!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1
Tracey
*the finals list is in no set order, Judging takes place after the closing of the contest..............
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Hood-wink again!
I really like the "chained sun" as a metaphor(?) for one's heart... and the last two lines as a whole....
It's great that you managed to write about this although you've never experienced it... I haven't, either
Well done with this poem.
I wish you lots of luck in the contest!
Keep writing!
Annie 
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Bandits Unite
Great work on this! I think that you have captured the sorrows of heartbreak most faithfully. great flow, and good use of imagery, really great work!
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geez care, this is good stuff! Is this about that certain person who is dumb and you went to the mall with. Oh.. i have a story foteth thou, wheneth we geteth the chance to speak again..eth.
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Wait, what are you talking about? What person I went to the mall with and is dumb? You confuse the crap out of me... I said this wasn't personal...
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bandits Unite
I really love this..it is simple yet a awsome piece of art work..three applauds
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Such a great piece of work...
Love it! It's truely a simple and BEAUTIFUL poem. Wish you the BEST luck in the contest!
Keep writing and God Bless
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oo i liked this one, and honey, i havent expierienced heartbreak either. still single, and still loving every minute of it (haha thats a complete lie) but some day you will feel love, but hopefully not heartbreak. great poem and good luck in the contest!
XOXO
Kara
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