You were to be my life
And you were to be my light
Why? Why?
You never look me in the eyes
A kiss from you is steel-tinged compromise
You make me feel like
Like I'm not real and
You make me feel like
Like I'm not real and
You make me feel like
Like I'm not real
Why? Why?
And it's time I seal my heart
And it's time I seal my heart
And it's time I seal my heart
And it's time I move on
You make me feel like
Like I'm not real and
You make me feel like
Like I'm not real and
You make me feel like
Like I'm not real
Why? Why?
You were to be my life
And you were to be my light
Why? Why?
A contest entry
- Pain, Without Love. by La Tua Cantante.
425 points, ended April 13, 2007, 36 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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nice phrase, steel-tinged compromise
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I write with an acoustic guitar... this one starts out very slow and light and gets heavy in the middle... dissonant guitar part, syncopation... comes back to slow and light with the repetition of the first/last line. Thanks for reading!
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This is an marvelous write you have wrote. You've used excellent repeation. I have to say my favorite part has to be;
"You were to be my life
And you were to be my light
Why?"
I know how you feel to think that someone was supposed to be the one to save you, your life was practically based on that person, but they went away.
Good luck in my contest!
-La Tua.
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Thank you so much!
I don't know if it's bad to give away the true subject matter... this one is about my mother... I'm touched that the poem is in your list of favorites
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this is a good write.
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