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Silent existence

You are the beauty of the rising sun

Maintaining your armour

You consume the splendour of my core

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Eroding my beauty

You replace my soul

Creating a silent existence

I become an implicit reality

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Watched

As I mature, within your realm of radiance

I feel your touch, as you slowly caress my being

Avoiding unpleasant hesitation

You pause

To admire

Your creation

A contest entry

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  • Darkened Seraph
    September 8, 2007

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    this is a cool write and one which i enjoyed reading because it has a good flow and a interesting image along with the cool picture you have used some very good wording has been used here


  • soldiersoul gold member
    May 7, 2007
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    daaaaaaaaaaaaaamn that made me all tingly INSIDE lol...


  • ChildeOfChaos
    April 16, 2007

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    Great interpretation of the picture. I love the imagery and the soft flow of this poem. Great write.


  • Poetic-Theorem silver member
    April 11, 2007

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    Wow, I would never have thought of any direction to go with this image. However, your vivd imagination and creativity matched the picture well.
    Additionally, your use of great disciptive words painted the image as well.
    Good luck!
    Take care,
    Bo


  • Luna Tique Fringe
    April 11, 2007

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    Thank you for entering,

    What a beautifully flowing piece. Maiden, Mother, Crone, whether or not
    a direct intention is painted into this. This touches me.


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    April 11, 2007

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    Wonderfully penned! You were certainly inspired with this picture and have sure done justice to it!
    All the best in this contest
    Gaylene


  • PerVirtuous
    April 10, 2007
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    Now, THAT's what I call having a ball!!! Three more bunnies!!!


  • Soulful Woman silver member
    April 10, 2007

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    I was stumped with this pic..But I see you werent.
    Stunning in its presentation..love it..
    Soulful Woman


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    April 10, 2007
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    Niice.. I love it. I love your style. It's so deep and meaningful.


  • Deliverance
    April 10, 2007

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    Sensual and floaty (yes its a shit word, but thats what came to mind!).
    Japan? For some reason I get Japanese theme here.

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