Oh is it but a shame?
A beauty from a glance,
the rock which He created,
He trusted us,
put it in our care,
Have we foresaken him?
Have we caused Him to shed a tear?
Like the innocent, we have done nothing that shalln't be forgiven,
we try,
we try to help that who is left in our care,
we try to protect that who is vulnerable,
We haven't quit,
we have strived,
The tear which streams down His face is one that is filled with sorrow
but the feeling in His heart is ingulfed in a warm fire of hope,
hope for the furture,
Evil shall always remain,
but that shalln't cause righteousness to tremble,
Like the knight who is knocked from his horse,
though week and tattered he mounts again,
ready and willing,
for no strike or blow shall frighten whats right
A contest entry
- Picture Inspiration by CherylAnn.
500 points, ended April 11, 2007, 19 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Excellent imagery! Although, there are a couple of spelling mistakes. I don't know if you WANTED to use the word, "shalln't" (becuase it isn't a word), but "shant" or "shall not" might be better. But overall, I LOVED it. You definitely have something to tell the world.
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a good write,although some word choices distracted from the overall feel of the write..
Good Luck and thanks for entering
Blessings
~Cheryl~
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I like the images in the final 2 stanzas. I think words like shalln't and what's detract from your piece. I would rather see them spelled out: shall not ( or will not) and what is. There are a couple of misspelled words as well.
Good piece.
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