All That I Can Do
Shall we say goodbye here?
Shall we go our separate ways?
Shall it be death that parts us?
Or will you let me share your grave?
I’m going to do,
All that I can do…
To keep you.
And I’m going to try,
To the day that I die…
To love you.
There’s no walking away
At the end of this moment.
Suspended in death’s embrace
Darling, cause we chose it.
Let the brimstone rain down,
Let this earth crumble away,
Let the heavens wage war
Over top of our grave.
I’m going to do,
All that I can do…
To keep you.
And I’m going to try,
Past the day that I die…
To love you.
Locked in a dead embrace
God please let it stay this way
I don’t want to lose you…
This grave is just for us two
I will spend eternity with you
I refuse to leave you…
I’m going to do,
All that I can do…
To keep you.
And I’m going to try,
Past the day that I die…
To love you.
Author notes
I kind of sang this as I wrote it, so it sounds better as lyrics. But anyways, hope you enjoy it!
A contest entry
- Picture Inspiration II by HerbalGoat.
300 points, ended April 26, 2007, 14 entries
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I was actually going to mention that this sounded more lyrical, due to the repetition of:
"I’m going to do,/ All that I can do…/ To keep you./ And I’m going to try,/ Past the day that I die…/ To love you."
The only thing I didn't like about this piece, lyrical or poetically, is that it employs a desperate tone. I don't count this against you, however, for that's just a personal peeve, and I don't want to be biased...
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Very beautiful!! I really liked this poem its one of my favorites that I have read today. you have a really good talent keep it up. Good luck in this contest :
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Ohh it's so beautiful and romantic, yet dark but in a good sense of course. I thought it was an awsome, too bad I can't write like that.
But keep it up.
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