Awake, O my soul
Taste mystery on your tongue
Must you suffer to truly know?
Is this what it means, to be so young?
And have you changed one
Heartache for another?
Did the clouds but pass away
To leave a stormy-sunny day?
Awake, O my soul
Rise to the cost
Sweep aside the blindfold, light the darkness
Reveal what we thought lost
The blood that covered her, and you
It covered me too
A lamb forced me on my face
Slain by servitude, for undeserved grace
Awake, O my soul
If this is all that's lost
I will gladly take that
It's a bearable cost
Servant to her,
As He was to me
I'd do for her
As He on the Tree
Awake, O my soul
This battle will make you whole
Author notes
Reflections from the early morning.
Please tell me what you think
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Very exceptional poetry! Nice patterns of thoughts. How and where to begin with the soul.. love these lines -
Servant to her,
As He was to me
I'd do for her
As He on the Tree
Depending the context of course, there is a natural principle which pulls up to a higher plane, like a blinding reason or a searing conscience, like a paralyzing will. It is the pull of spiritual gravity i think. Fab poem!
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Interesting write and one with reliqious strength. Yes we must awaken our soul to guide us on our many ways. Thanks for sharing this strong poem.
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the 1st stanza is where the true meat of this poem lies. The rest goes on to disect the original statement and then the final line wraps it up telling us again that it is only with adversity that we truly can mature or resign ourselves to death.
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Interesting read. I could interpret this in a couple different ways. I think the "o, my soul" line was a little too repetitious for my personal taste, but your imagery is striking.
~Lori
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I am confused
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Ah, but then my thoughts would make sense, and we can't have that.
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I think this is an excellent read, lines like "Slain by servitude, for undeserved grace, and the last two lines. All flowed nicely
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Thanks.
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Wow, de ja vue is running rampant in me today, another I could have sworn I have read before and yet... Ah well. As to the line questioned below, perhaps something like "A lamb forced me to face [insert something significant, like myself or Truth or Him]
Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors. Hetohke'e *
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Well, the 'o my soul' bits were suggested by reading the Old King James Bible... either Song of Songs or some Psalms, I can't remember... And I realized it has connections to a certian song by Thrice, whose name I can't remember.
Thanks for the comment.
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Although I loved most of this poem I was perplexed by line 15 "a lamb forced on my face". Are you speaking of the Lamb of God or have I missed the reference entirely?
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It should be "a lamb forced ME on my face", and that is indeed what the symbol was meant to convey.
EDIT: though on further reflection, that stanza may want clearing up...
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