Shattered dreams caused
By Satan's pernicious acts.
Human immortality split
Psycho bludgeoning bash.
Hope is now forlorn.
Conclusion of perilous treason.
Unspeakable atrocities committed.
Winters ending season.
Tragic midnight darkness.
Undead necropolis awaits.
Tortured souls howl.
Hades smoldering gates.
Time's cruel advance.
Nightmare's agonizing lament.
Strangling noose tightens.
becoming my black decent.
Author notes
This is actually quite a complex one that I have written, but oh well! Hope u enjoy it!
A contest entry
- Help! i really need some inspiration by lucy sky-diamond.
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Um.....tell me what ya think? 'kay!
Comments
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I give it 5 STARS. I is a very intresting poem. A bit hard to understand at first but overal it made good sence. Go in the finalists.
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Results...
Originality: 4/4 I’m not very sure what its about.
Rhythm: 3/4 It didn’t have a discernable rhythm, but the rhyming did help.
Wording: 4/4 Great wording.
Ease of Reading: 4/4 Flowed great.
Final Score: 15/16 Very nice write.
For a more extensive critique contact me after the close of the contest.
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Wow, unspeakable things of horror and darkness. There's a lot of weird drak things in here. Good write and good luck.
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very vivid imagery, and a very powerful piece, thank you very much for your entry, and best of luck
lucy
xxx
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ooh i like how it kind of ends in a cliff hanger! i like this one too =]
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