scars may adorn these pale, frail arms,
but i assure you-
i'm over it.
and i'm stronger[emotionally]
than you could ever dream of being.
so don't let these big blue eyes catch you off guard,
because you'll be dazzled,
and these freckles may scream innocence,
[but the rest of my appearence ruins that]
hipbones jut and jeans fall down
i'm shrinking
and i love it.
sarcastic words flow freely from these full lips of mine,
and a slender neck when angled just right
will have you begging to be mine.
love me,
hate me,
i don't care,
because you're just mad at the fact:
i'm not yours.
Author notes
mmmm.
hope your contest goes better than the last one[which, might i add...i won. sorry. needed to brag].
but hope you like this one. came outta no-where.
sticks and stones will break your bones, but words will never hurt you,
unless they're carved in sticks and stones and thrown at you!!!!
A contest entry
- Love Me, Hate Me, Love Nature, Love yourself. by sluha.
530 points, ended April 20, 2007, 14 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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haha... indeed this really works in the category very well... but yeah one has to brag once in a while right? but anyways this is a very nice piece... exactly what I was looking for in the contest... the end is particularly great... those two lines love me, hate me... were basically taken straight from the contest...and then you add the "I don't care, because you're just mad at the fact: I'm not yours." this is extremely impressive... You really captured what I was looking for. I also like the freckles part... really shined my world there... really great work... but anyways thanks for entering and good luck in the contest.
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love me,
hate me,
i don't care,
because you're just mad at the fact:
i'm not yours.
<3 owch. harsh words
well-portrayed
lots of lov sweetie!
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"hipbones jut and jeans fall down
i'm shrinking
and i love it.
sarcastic words flow freely from these full lips of mine,
and a slender neck when angled just right
will have you begging to be mine."
i wish this was how i felt about ME!!!!
im thin, but i wanna be thinner!
i can never seem to be the right size....
oh well, i still loved this whole poem!
great job hunnybear!!!
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so don't let these big blue eyes catch you off guard,
because you'll be dazzled,
and these freckles may scream innocence,
[but the rest of my appearence ruins that]
strong emotion here hunny! im lovin it!
although i feel the ending was a BIT too obvious i still feel you did well in the starting.
great write love
<3
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"so don't let these big blue eyes catch you off guard,
because you'll be dazzled,
and these freckles may scream innocence,
[but the rest of my appearence ruins that]"
Whoa;;
That sounds like me...literally.
I have blue eyes and freckles =P
"hipbones jut and jeans fall down
i'm shrinking
and i love it."
That is (no lie) EXACTLY what I've been thinking all fucking day. It's such an amazing feeling and I wouldn't trade it for anything. :]]
Great write you have here;; I'm gonna check out some more of your work<333
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Hunn I love this write! its very creative and it shows alot of emotion! and yea i bet who ever r if this about someone i bet he would be veryyyyyyyy jelous cause he cant have you! he would be cause your an amazing person and dont let yourself or anyone change you your perfect in your own little perfect way! I learned from YOU is that do not change yourself just because of some stupid ass idiotic guy cause they are not worth it and I am perfect in my own little way and i should never ever ever ever ever change just because of an idiotic noncaring stupid ass guy! and niether should you! ily hunn byebye
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