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I'll Bet

Today you will take hold of a part of my soul,
Keep it close and then drop it in the deep ocean,
Left to sink slowly to the core of the warm earth,
It shall take a lifetime to find it again, friend,
You look so happy today it is that twinkle,
In every word you speak that gives it away,
The ocean is a big place to be lost within,
You smile in a new way I have never seen,
She brings you to life; your face is animated,
But your glow is burning my eyes, I look away,
And I don't know how much longer I can smile,
Hold onto the configuration of muscles,
But I still carry on nodding eager to know,
You tell me she has eyes like the universe,
You tell me she laughs like the sound of music,
You tell me she is wonderful like the moon,
I smile and I know I have lost the battle,
You see you never really knew but I fought,
An awkward silent fight for your golden heart,
Though you never knew I was a competitor,
She is great you explain your heart full for her,
This smile doesn't suit me, it begins to hurt,
I am pleased for you I can see you're happy,
It shows in every pour in every move,
So I hold up the white flag wave it about,
I withdraw from the run your honour, I withdraw,
I withdraw from this rat race because I have failed,
A better lady won the war she won you,
I'll bet she's wonderful,
I'll bet she's beautiful,
That girl you talk about,
That girl you've fallen for,
That girl you love above me.

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Option 11 This comes from the heart.

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  • Maybe Anastasia
    April 11, 2007

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    mmm boy can I reelate to this. good solid write but it was really hard to read. I think you need some spacing in there. It's a strong write though thanks for teh entry.