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Fatal

One step towards the chasm
busy ripping to shreds
              the soil under toe.

Fear manifests in liquid
              tension,
tracing thin canals
over the lace - obscuring the
              flush.

Thoughts' whispered orders
falling feckless on
            unable ears.

            Motionless -
life slows its journey
through every hollow.

            Heartbeat

            (rapid)

            ceases.


I am    conquered.

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scared to death...

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  • Quality Contests
    April 13, 2007

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    Intense. Thump-THUMP. Thanks for entering and makin this contest a success. You're the first person to have chosen this metaphor.