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The twisted black hole,
buried deep within my chest,
echos with the loss of you.


Shuddering, huge sobs resounding
through this empty cavity;
my punishment greater than life,
having to exist in limbo.


Pain twists into chambers,
bereft of any feelings.
Oxygenated emotions create
a chasm wider than death.

 

So little to look forward to

except total breakdown.

There must (surely) be a way

of speeding that process up.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

A contest entry

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  • Lyre-Bird-
    April 13, 2007
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    Firstly I want to thank you for entering the contest and following all the rules........
    Your entry has been added to the finals list!!!!!

    wish you the best of luck!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1

    Tracey

    *the finals list is in no set order, Judging takes place after the closing of the contest..............


  • Random Thoughts
    April 10, 2007

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    Awesome dark write on the pain that your heart can cause you!!
    Expressed a lot of emotion in this very different and unique poem,
    Best luck to you in this contest!!

    -Brenden


  • LAPoe gold member
    April 10, 2007

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    Ok Mr C... I am sitting here racking my brain trying
    not to come up with a cliche response to yet
    another mind blowing write. But being I am
    one big walking cliche myself, I cant think of
    anything original to say that would come close
    to expressing how I feel about the originality I see here. So here is my cliche response anyway...
    "How heartfelt this is, it beats to it's own rhythm"
    there, now that is cliche!!!!
    Love this one my friend!!!!
    laurie.


  • going nowhere
    April 10, 2007

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    deeply distressing. the unknowing, while distraught, is an awful feeling. Hope you find what you need to recover...without speeding the process of breakdown.