Sleep my child and have sweet dreams,
Nothing will be as it seems.
Close your eyes and dream away,
Sleep until the final day,
When nothing still can be the same,
On this day they'll call your name.
Sweet angels will caress you, dear,
The sweetest melody you'll hear.
Soon this last day will arrive,
The day for which tonight you strive;
But now I have to bid adieu
Because I won't be there with you.
Author notes
inspired by http://allpoetry.com/poem/1210613
A contest entry
- Anything that has good rhyme!(pre-writes allowed) by ExpectingMommy18.
650 points, ended October 25, 2007, 73 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - ANYTHING SHORT by Blooming Poet.
400 points, ended March 7, 2008, 105 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Reminds me of Billy joel's lullabye. but sadder in parts. great use of words and overall a brillent write. Great job
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Such a beautiful song... But I didn't even know it when I wrote this poem.
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This is such an awesome write yet it has that hit of sadness to it that makes me wonder.
I read the comments on it and it sort of reminded me about the Titanic scene also. Anyway I felt this was very well done. Good luck in the contest.
Cathy -
wow. this very much reminded me of a scene in the movie titanic. You've seen that movie? When the ship is sinking and a mother is telling her kids a fairy tale so that they will go to sleep. This was like that, because you say that the person has to wait for the final day. But maybe that's just how I see it! hehe! Anyway, very well written this is. I'm bookmarking it!
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Thanks so much for commenting! Everyone might see something different in this poem, but I like your interpretation...
I have not seen the entire movie and I can't remember that scene... We watched it at school some time, but not all of it.
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Very Beautiful Good luck in the contest
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wow the ending if weird but not in a bad way this was beautiful!!
you did a great job,i love ryhming poetry and a lullybye is exactly what i needed.
thank you for entering and good luck in the contest! -
Bandits United
Soon this last day will arrive,
The day for which tonight you strive;
But now I have to bid adieu
Because I won't be there with you.
This is very beautiful
I am wishing I had Authors Notes for insite
I feel as if I am missing a lot of the story
Rick
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Thanks so much for your comment, I think it is maily up to the reader what they see in this piece...
To me, it is about a mother who is going to die soon (probably by suicide) and is saying goodbye to her child... kind of. But it's really up to you if you agree with my POV on this piece. Poetry can have many different ways of interpretation I think.
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This is beautiful and sad but it sends a feeling of calmness over you. I love it. This is just wonderful. Thanks for entering. This is exactly the feel I was looking for.
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wow what a nic poem it mad me kinda sleepy as my siser read it to me kinda like a lulaby it was so beutful and pretty your awful good at writin pretty stuff miss annie love me missy
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Wonderful rhyme as always. A really sad write
Sad but beautiful as cheeky has said!
Gaylene
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awwwwww cuz this is butiful sad but butiful... well done perfik rhyme xxx big cuz xxx
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This was really good and the rhyme was fantastic. Keep writing, Meggh xxxxxxxxxxxx
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