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Velvet Vessel

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There is wave
to rush my Ocean's wetter wish
in pounding pulse
to swell forever
from deep within the need for motion;

to ebb in flow,
as Passion's presence
in bubbled shore of smoother skin,

where moon and tide
might smile together
finding laugh as Night's lost river,

in something wilder
rolling cover
of deeper trust in velvet vessel

pumping power.




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  • Lyre-Bird-
    April 13, 2007
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    Firstly I want to thank you for entering the contest and following all the rules........
    Your entry has been added to the finals list!!!!!

    wish you the best of luck!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1

    Tracey

    *the finals list is in no set order, Judging takes place after the closing of the contest..............


  • CarolDesjarlais silver member
    April 12, 2007
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    both sensual and soft....beautifully penned, my friend.


  • klassy lassy
    April 11, 2007

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    Mercurial magnetism taking form in silver mirth,

    "where moon and tide
    might smile together
    finding laugh as Night's lost river"

    "Even the night shall be made light about thee."
    (Psalms)

    As always your love of life and life of love surges.


  • cherche -d -ame
    April 11, 2007

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    xoxoxoxo
    reenie


  • Cannonsfire
    April 10, 2007

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    If ever a poet had no need for cliche's then it is you my friend, you give wonder to new phrases and make the reader feel eerything you write Love, C


  • tara wilson gold member
    April 10, 2007

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    in pounding pulse
    to swell forever
    from deep within the need for motion;
    I like these lines, a wonderful poem!
    This is great, and I like 'pumping power' as the
    conclusion. No cliche here in this poem!


  • Nicolette gold member
    April 10, 2007

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    "of deeper trust in velvet vessel
    pumping power"

    Those two lines especially break the cliche of "heart". I've written a similar poem earlier and I know how hard it is...but I guess for you it's easy. Wonderfully done - I like the velvet touch here!

    ~ Nicolette


  • Night Hope gold member
    April 10, 2007

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    "where moon and tide
    might smile together
    finding laugh as Night's lost river"

    Sighhh...Wonderful penning, dear Scribe...sensual & lovely, my Friend...Good luck in the contest, Sweetie... Wanda


  • wolfspiritguide gold member
    April 10, 2007

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    pounding pulse and pumping power...i can't see any way to beat this...there is so much heart in here...

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