As you sit and stew within your anger
with selfish pride to reinforce
justification in thoughtless actions
to fend against remorse,
Your angel's eyes leak saline streams
down soft checks blushed with hurt
Alone in need with battered heart
shaken trust and trembled skirt
As you nurture your mighty ego
with feeble lies of pretensive just
Your heart fails to acknowledge
she is not mere thrice holes of lust
Her loving gifts so freely given
you have spurned with bitter force
Count your blessings oh simple fool
you best engage a change of course
She has given you more than her body
in deep devotion as your wife
She has given you all her dreams
and the remainder of her life
She has given you more than babies
in all deep passions she has riled
She has given you immortality
becoming the mother of your child
Weither you believe or not in story
the age old tale of forbidden fruit
She is here for your completion
and should be held in your repute
In her arms there lies your heaven
and in her scorn there lies your hell
Life before her was your purgatory
and with neglect you again shall dwell
She is your angel heaven sent
for you to endear and not dissolve
the love and faith she has within you
In her well being lies your resolve
Of all the men upon this earth
with various qualities in her view
of all those men of hers to chose
she exclusively hand picked you
So honour her, cherish her,
embrace her soul and breathe love's myrrh
with provisions and not abstractions
Go to her, amend her
not with words for she does prefer
the genuine truth spoke through actions
Life be brief to waste with grief
so cast off anger and be free
Be her man in more than body
and in your soul as meant to be
Author notes
*My apologies to those I have yet to comment on their work. There has been a death in the family and I have lost my only sibling. I wrote this poem the day before it happened and just haven't had the time to post it. I'm not in much of a writing mood. *
As inspired by the image presented by the contest. I have seen many instances over the course of my years on this earth where some men over react to circumstances or grow just plain selfish towards the wives/girlfriends that love them. I've always hated it when I saw these instances for in most cases they clearly don't see the good in what they have in their woman's love. It's a brutally sad pitfall that I have long since vowed to avoid. I do realize that not all women are angels, but in my eyes the majority of them are.
So I wrote this as a message to those who have such a wonderful angel in their life. Put down the beer, toss aside the remote, tell the guys tonight is to be spent with your woman. Don't leave her in tears. Love her! Cherish her! Appreciate her!
A divine creator put her here for your soul's fulfillment. Life would be so void without her.
A contest entry
- Weeping Angel by Twilight4Eternity.
700 points, ended April 15, 2007, 16 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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WOW
Wow what can I say, but you never cease to amaze me how you capture the realities in life... If only there were more like you.
The ending " Life be brief to waste with grief
so cast off anger and be free" words to live by.
Thank you for sharing -
This is a moving write, with a very good message. You are an amazing person amo, and i am very sorry for your loss, i wish there were something i could do but i know nothing can take the pain away. keep it up, dear friend.
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It's incredible, my friend. Simply astounding really. You've woven words into a tapestry of emotion, warning and deep meaning. Superb write. So very sorry to hear of your loss. Blessings to you, my caveman friend. May all be well with you still.
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Excelent
You have truly found how love and joy intertine . Its not what you have thatdraws a woman its what you hear and see in her . For a woman when a man truly listens its a diamond if he brings her a flower even if it were a weed its a diamond and well I could go on and on and when men realize this family life will be restored for there is no beauty as a woman loved the way a woman should be . And I am trulu heart sick for your loss I am sure the love you gave shines true in heaven this very day
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This is a wonderful piece you have penned my friend...the deep love and respect you have are so special and unique. I'm so glad you won silver
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OMG! that was soo beautyfull very moving and sad
i'm sorry for loss i wish the best of happyness (if hope that makes sence) very inspireing to go to your loved ones in nothing but love and affetion.
i think have or atleast should have some one as our angel to help protect and guide us
this piece deserves more than 5 stars i think.
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Inspiring words you ahve penned here..so deserving of the shiney thing!
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Life be brief to waste with grief
so cast off anger and be free
Be her man in more than body
and in your soul as meant to be ..... ooh how true this stanza is.... I am so sorry dear man, big hugs.....
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absolutely beaUTIFUL! well deserved silver... im sry i haven't read it earlier.. been quite bust actually.. so yea.. so how u been?
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beautifully inspriring words!!! Love how you interpreted the picture...
I am going to agree with another comment and say that these lines were my favorite:
"In her arms there lies your heaven
and in her scorn there lies your hell
Life before her was your purgatory
and with neglect you again shall dwell"
well done and my heart goes out to you in your time of loss
*hugs*
Michelle Fey
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You have my deeps sympathies for your loss. I will keep you in my prayers.
You truly are a gifted soul. I am speechless
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A wonderful job, trully miraculous job
I have to say, I wish you all the best in this troublesome time and everything evens out
I checked out the picture and I could appreciate this so much more! This is a seriously brilliant poem
The language was amazing, you could write out the phone book and make it sound poetic
The thoughts and the body of the poem just was so interesting and it left me hungry to read more
So the length was wonderful
And the message: PERFECT!
You have a heart of GOLD!
Love and hugs
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First of all, I just want to say that I hope you're holding out alright, my friend. You're being held in the sweetest light in these trying times, and you're being supported from the young Grasshopper from afar.
Secondly, this is an absolutely gorgeous poem, as are all your poems! The title to this one spoke to me so powerfully, and something about it makes a spark in me begin to dance. You may be inspiring me...but yes, excellent title, and I was waiting to see where it was going to be brought across.
"In her arms there lies your heaven
and in her scorn there lies your hell
Life before her was your purgatory
and with neglect you again shall dwell"
Those are my favorite lines in the piece. Those ones stopped me right in my tracks when I was reading. There's a fine line when it comes to love, and you spoke so well about what's on all sides of that line if you cross over. I love this piece, and it holds such a truth. Don't wait until it's gone to fully understand just what it is that you have.
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Beautiful
This is a wonderful piece full of emotion. I love the message you incorporate into this. I especially love the way you ended it with the last few stanzas. I enjoyed your authors note just as much. My heart goes out to you. Thank you for the lovely entry. -
You words have always reached deep into my heart and soul and mine to yours. We have spoken of this many times..
This piece showed so much the man you are..Giving your all to your relationship, as I know you do. Love is such a beautiful bond if handled the right way.
Your words express the respect you have for your love and for women.
Take care of yourself and come back soon.. Experience the process of loss and the inevitable healing.
Stay well my friend...looking forward to your return.
Soulful Woman
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Your angel's eyes leak saline streams
down soft checks blushed with hurt
i loved these lines. we will miss you while you are away. take your time. do what you need to do. peace and light, kp
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