Taking life....
Damned bringer of death,
You have failed me,
Not in what I asked,
But what was expected...
In a list
A contest entry
- Break The Cliche by Lyre-Bird-.
550 points, ended April 13, 2007, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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lol at myself..a sturdy support, lol, not a turdy one
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You should "edit" the critique.
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Thought I'd leave a little comic relief..but, alas, you've separated the two..lol..
I like the animation,sca..unique -
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Hmmm... I was suprised at how few people have an animate picture at all. I just happened to have two photos taken secconds after each other, and as such I got creative.
And the comic relief is good, I had a quiet laugh to myself. Maybe it was better back in the day, when you couldn't go back on what was said.
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Cilche..broken..into tiny pieces. Love the metaphor..the last two lines..aturdy support for all that is jammed between those two lines. poignant piece.
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So strong and well done! You have an amazing way of make such deep points in so few words and lines. I love reading your thoughts. You are strong in brevity.
Very nicely done and stood strong to the challenge.
Excellent work!
Best always!
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gollly that is so... i dont even know what im trying to say .... but good
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Clever
Mate, I don't know how you do it. A great result for a hard task that requires good perception and you certainly have come up with it here. Very clever.
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Firstly I want to thank you for entering the contest and following all the rules........
Your entry has been added to the finals list!!!!!
wish you the best of luck!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1
Tracey
*the finals list is in no set order, Judging takes place after the closing of the contest..............
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Nicely done, totally fits what the contest was asking for and!! makes sense!! I think contests bring out the best in your writing. I enjoy reading your work and wish you luck in the contest although you really don't need luck!!! You are a very talented writer
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Oh very good in a twisted sort of way...only someone like me could comprehend and go "Yeah, definitely, right on!" Good luck....Life isn't what we expect, eh?
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