every day they look onto me and all they have to say is who is he
why is he hear
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and i tell them all
i'm hear because i'm alive
i'm still breathing
even in the night wen i'm stearing at the cracks on my ceiling
wen i hate myself
wen i cut myself
and every time i take a breath of this fine air
i'm steal hear
and every time those big stone walls start closings in
i fell a rhythm in my heart
i fell a power in my soul
telling me one more try
and i'm steal alive
now i know you bleach heads have a lot to say
but just cuzz i'm hear
ill be going on my way
and the reason i can do that
thear is just one reason
i'm steal alive
A contest entry
- To Live and Breathe and Never Die Again by pointlessdayz.
525 points, ended April 30, 2007, 19 entries
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Powerful! I can relate to this so well...
What a life story you have to tell... -
I really like this piece a lot and I found it a joy to read...the feelings and emotions are ones that a lot of people can relate to...although some people try to hide that little fact...anywways...this was a really awesome poem
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I liked this poem... a lot.... i can relate to it in many ways so that probably helps with the loving this poem ... haha... my favorite part is the "i'm still breathing even in the night when im stareing at the cracks on my ceiling"lines... i dunno why... i guess i can just relate... haha
good job! lovededededed it
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ok, before I actually comment on this one, I would like to ask you to go back and edit this piece for grammar. There are a lot of mistakes here (and I know that I didn't include the rule about grammar until after you posted this...). If these mistakes were intentional, then let me know and I'll let them stand. But if not, then please edit them. THanks!
-alex -
hey hey nice poem.. its great but i guess u were ment to right.."every day they look onto me and all they have to say is who is he
why is he here" in stead of "hear.."
just a comment but hey great poem keep it up..
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