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Waiting

What the hell am I doing here?
Standing listlessly on the beach
Staring as the waves crash down and down and down
The tide goes in, the tide goes out
and I'm just watching, waiting.

What the hell am I doing here?
The moon is full again.
I just staring up at the stars
It fades away and then returns
and I'm just watching, waiting.

What the hell am I doing here?
What am I doing with my life?
Always wishing for tomorrow
But never doing anything for today.
I'm sick of just watching and waiting.

Please tell me what you think

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  • ripplesonwater
    May 13, 2007
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    I like this, and I know what you mean too...sometimes I feel like I spend more time trying to understand what's going on, what I should be doing, than I spend actually doing anything.
    The repetition of the first line is good, makes the frustration real. Change is hard, and I'm starting to realize that real changes have to happen one tiny bit at a time.

  • maheo
    April 13, 2007

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    Good question, what are you waiting for? I think that you have portrayed the sense of bored wrestlessness in your piece that lends itself to your message. nicely done