we were lazy day afternoons
and kissing in the rain
the way we had seen
in magazines
you were my
sunshine anytime
and i was your
windswept street
couldn't imagine any place
other than our place
where the stars and the clouds
both turn gray
we were dance tunes on 45's
filtered through
antiqued glass
where even you look graceful
the cabbies
can't call us
homeless anymore
because when i've got you
and you've got me
there are no more needs
couldn't abstain from anything
other than everything
that is not in some way
for the honor of you
we are lost lights
learning new tricks
to old games
and finding ourselves winning
you are my
sunshine anytime
and i am your
windswept street
Author notes
For my Poe.
A contest entry
- Help Me Express It by Heavenly Angel.
550 points, ended June 18, 2007, 20 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Loved it before and I still love it, love buttons
Thank you so much for sharing this; I loved this
A truly fine sharing into the contest -
a tender penning here, dear poet, although a few places I suggest a refining. L16 perhaps a rewording for it almost sounds like a sideways not quite compliment there. Even in lower case writes it is considered better form to capitalize the personal pronoun "I", just a thought.
Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors. 
Hetohke'e 
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Love buttons, what a truly beautiful and wonderful write!
I love this! Written in your wonderful and unique style! Does my heart good to read your poetry, sweetie!
Love you!
Butter buns -
I like this one alot! You did a great job on this one. So much love and caring can be felt in these words. Keep that pen flowing.
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Love becomes you. *grins and pulls you against me, nuzzling into your hair*
Thank you, my windswept street; it was beautiful, almost as much as you. Almost.
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you know there is a kind of warmth in this that i don't normally see from you, you dida great job on this, keep it flowing
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Wonderful Poem!!It strikes a personal chord with myself.Wonderful.
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I like it, it has an off beat to it. I love how you come back to You are my sunshine anytime on the opposite beat as the first time you said it. It gave it a unique style and made it a wonderful read. I thank you for sharing.
May you always write from your heart for you shall never write wrong if you do.
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Cute and sweet...love is in the air..."you are my sunshine anytime and I am your windswet street", this is my favorite part and I love you repeated it...lovley , thanks for sharing
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Wow
Jamie,
this is really well written. It is different from your other writes and I like it a lot. You had a few perfect stanzas in this poem, but I won't copy and paste them. Wonderfully written Jamie. I liked the visuals that you have painted for us in this. Keep it flowing!!!
Always,
Summer
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Lo-Amo
the cabbies
can't call us
homeless anymore
because when i've got you
and you've got me
there are no more needs
couldn't abstain from anything
other than everything
that is not in some way
for the honor of you
Salute!!!!! -
wow! someone else remembers the old 45's. this is so very awesome. i love the imagery and the stanza:
the cabbies
can't call us
homeless anymore
because when i've got you
and you've got me
there are no more needs
i would much prefer a bridge with the one i love and he me than a castle with a mean old king. thank you for sharing this write with me. viyanna rosemarie
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beautiful
This has such a romantic tone to it, Jamie-kins!
Beautiful and real....
"you were my
sunshine anytime
and i was your
windswept street
couldn't imagine any place
other than our place
where the stars and the clouds
both turn gray"
I love this!
Lynda
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the cabbies
can't call us
homeless anymore
because when i've got you
and you've got me
there are no more needs
definately my favorite part. i liked how this was sweet... and to the point. sometimes i feel like i stumble over words when im trying to write like this. great job. I love the storyline.
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This is a wonderful, sweet piece. It was like having cotton candy at the shore and everything was perfect and would go on forever. I truly enjoyed this piece.. Awesome !! Debby
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Thank You, Debby. That was the feel I was going for. I really appreciate it.
jamie
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this was a remarkable piece you penned poet, I was lost in this read, lol not a bad lost a good one. Keep it up for something new you did a wonderful job.
Thanks for sharing.
Vsutton -
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Thank you so much. I really appreciate it.
jamie
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