So maybe if I kiss you all over,
with chlorine lips, meant to kill,
I'll make you as miserable as I am.
Sitting on my bedroom floor,
contemplating where we turned,
from being wrapped in eachothers arms and bliss,
to
a
pain
worse than
any other.
I'm lost without you.
and it makes my stomach churn,
thinking of how we could make this work.
[I know we could never ever. & I truly shouldn't bother.]
but I'll always remember how warm your arms were.
and how cold I am,
every single night.
Please tell me what you think
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I love this and I can really relate. I can feel the emotions here. They're so real that they pull at my heart. I love how beautifully this is written.
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I know how that feels...i feel that ache and pain every night and every day now, because he's not with me anymore and i just really want him to be. Ahh, heartache.
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You break my heart every time.
You are the goddess of words <3
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i loveee you
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i love this.
this is exactly what i am going through right now.
props to you for getting it written down.
<3
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The first comment "suggestion" is to write what my first impression was. My first impression was: wow, really realistic and emotional.
The opening stanza was really, really strong. "meant to kill" was used excellently. Then the ending three lines were astounding! It makes you feel like the person and now I feel sad.
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ooh. baby.
i adore this.
[but i a.dore. you much more]
beautiful && yet so tragic.
bookmarking this.
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thanks loveeeey
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This is really good. I liked this alot. Such emotions!
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thankssss
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