Look at me
all *glammed* out for you
with my neon eyeliner
and vinyl tophat
my pink crucifix
tucked inside my scarlet negelgee
I have to [[hide]] the religion I practice
while I use this syringe filled with heroin
and my extra syringe full of LSD
tucked inside my garter
I'm your gutter slutt babydoll
with illumintating stars in my amber eyes
grab your camera baby;;
come record me;;
I'll put on see-through platforms
and we'll shoot me shooting up on my velour sofa
I'll put on my eyeshadow
to cover the brutal bruise you gave me yesterday
[it's okay baby, that was my fault anyway]
and some lipstick to cover
my bleeding lip
make myself beautifull to [hide]
my fractured ribs
and dislocated hipbone
I'll bat my pretty eyelashes
at your hollywood camera
and after;;
we'll go on a beautiful acid trip
I'll forgive you for the pain
you've inflicted on me baby,
if only you tell me
that you think I'm pretty baby...♥
Author notes
I suppose this falls into the Abuse and Drugs catergories...and I'm working on a fresh write for ya! Hope you like it!
♥
Xx
In a list
A contest entry
- 203;203;203;203;203;203;​​;​;&#& by WhatLiesBeneath.
690 points, ended July 15, 2007, 52 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Now this was something! You poetically brought in all the elements of a completely disfunctional relationship LOL Well done
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This Was Gorgeous!
Love The Concept,
Purdy Picture Aswell,
x
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gorgeous. I love it. I love your dark edge to your poetry. It's amazing. =]
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Wow! This has to be one of the most amazing Dirty Pretty poems I have read. I loved the pictures, it fitted perfectly with it. This was powerful and pain, but brilliant. I really liked how it flowed and how you set it all out. I'll be really looking forward to reading your fresh write that you plan to do. Thanks for entering.
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thank you dear, i'm so glad to hear that you liked it!
the fresh write i'm going to enter is still a work in progress, but i'm hoping to be finished with it soon! will enter as soon as it's finished! thanks so much for commenting
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♥
Xx
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this was a great write and i really enjoyed reading this..your words were powerful and emotional and this was a great dirtry pretty poem keep writting your talented
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God i love dirty pretty, you did and excellent job with this
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i love the picture that you used. it just fit this poem wonderfully. the poem was beautiful, tragic, deep, dark. everything that you could want in this. and your word choice was suburb. it couldn't have been better actually, i felt like i could feeeel everything,.
the last line is a killler. amazing.
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coley -
Wow nice poetry dear Xtacy. Wonderful demonstration of all the techniques of poetry. Keep writing dear. I am so impressed. Nature is beautiful, so does being natural. Great work. I would be happy, if you could spare some time to stamp your views on my poems
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i love it. how it goes together and almost the model reference factor. idk, its kinda how i saw it.
great job on this. and for the silver trophy(i gots bronze hehe)
♥Love
[[Chaos]]
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i loveeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeed this lots!
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Poor babydoll.
All she wants is love and to be loved.
She accepts being a victim.
How I want to take her away from the pain.
x
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Ohh, love it doll!
"and my extra syringe full of acid "
this line made me giggle
I dont know why im an expert on drugs
but you cant reallly shoot up acid doll
theyre pills
but I loved the way you put that anyway,
This was ana amzing piece
and the picture at the top really brings out the meaning,
gorgoues job doll,
amazing!!!
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Hmmm, not being an ass or anything but...
You can inject acid. I have done my fair share and the most common form I have used is paper dipped in acid to soak it up.
But yes, you can inject LSD.
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Wow
I loved it. That was..breathtaking.
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whoa... WHOA!! this is utterly the most AMAZING yet to be entered!!
this is fantastic, INSTANT to the finalist!!
wow.. beautifull
ily!
♥ =]
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