i'm sorry
you don't deserve this
every night
a liquid shield drowns his senses
fortification for his unspeakable deeds
i'm sorry
his shadow stumbles across the wall
as he pushes you down
face meets ground
again
i'm sorry
the stench of a rotting heart
disguised as cheap vodka breath
clogging your nose
as hateful words are flung in your face
i'm sorry
alone again but not for long
haunted by memories of aimless blows
he knows not what he does
you hope
i'm sorry
how do you survive?
your image in the mirror
decorated with blood
adorned with empty eyes
i'm sorry
another night spent by my side
there's nothing i can do to save you
just rock you in my arms
and guide you off to sleep
i'm so sorry
Author notes
This is, in a way written from two perspectives. Both my best friend and I have had similar unfortunate experiences...and we both depend on eachother and go to eachother when we have nowhere else to run to. He consoles me, and I return the favor whenever I can.
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this is very sad but it's good you can go to each other. I liked the way you put "I'm sorry" in there it gave it more feeling. Great write thabks for the entry.
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i liked it. gets the point across and has strong emotions.
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ahhh, so sad but written so eloquently. i really liked the repetition of 'i'm sorry'.
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Thanks for the applause and taking the time to read and comment, I appreciate it!
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Beautifully written, and a good friend indeed...we all need someone to lean on...even if it hurts outloud...at least you get a sorry...that does mean something...thanks for sharing
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the stench of a rotting heart
disguised as cheap vodka breath
clogging your nose
poetic genius runs rampant throughout this entire piece. great going. I liked it very much. peace and light, kp
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OMG....This is amazing do you have any idea of how talented you are??????????????? WOW Again you have floored me with your talent. It's like you see right throught to the heart of the matter....Well done.
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I like the repetition of the line "im sorry" it really hammers home the whole idea of multiple perspectives, the victim and the consoler. great imagery as well, the first stanza was especially strong.
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