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Shades of me Passing By.....

Watch a life pass on by.....

Casting eyes toward a moving mirror......a empty screen put on play....

 

Fingers drape across a pulsing chest.
Hands sooth the tempo of the mood.
Arms enclose a figure that redeems true.
Watching night turn to day, time doesn't bring enough relief to suduce me from you...
Marking the sin i've put onto you, my hands quake at the thought of losing you.....
The seasons of the changing day, are nothing but a sad and dismile drive to a far off place.....
Denting the form of the mattress, holding down all my weight.
Hoping that the wrinkles will smooth over these unforgivable lies.
Phase past my regretable mistakes, master the art of a smile... then watch it break.... Rewind the life i've missed, color my skin and turn me blue.
Watch the sorrow seep through my mirroring eyes.
Reach up to the sky, grasp the glass that keeps me safe from my slaving mind.
Paint me gray, stun me blue, call me on the day this dream can come true.

Wondering why this music won't surrender to my will.
Waiting for a sign.

Holding onto my sides, wishing that the pain would subside.
Pictures dance in the sun, and fall when the moon loses its capability.
Singing my heart above city tops, screaming out my soul to a wasteland of undesirable tastes.

Watch them all fade away.....
How could they make me choose?
A angel over, order in a chaotic mind.

Won't you be my everything?

Understand i'm not a man.....Without you.......

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  • ImJustADude
    March 31, 2008

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    I liked this poem a great deal. The way you wrote it gave the reader a sense of shifting and of movement until the question and statement at the end. Well done. I believe you misspelled dismal in line 8.

  • surreptitious
    April 15, 2007

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    This is an absolutely beautiful write. I really felt every word of it. Your desire and lament are palpable throughout. Really, I'd like to choose a word or a line but I like it all. good luck in the contests.


  • Angel With No Halo
    April 10, 2007
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    "Understand I'm not a man without you" those words alone made this poem. Your style is unique and and the flow was wonderful. Spoke of true love and a need for that one special person you write about. thank you for your wonderful entry and good luck

    ~Krys~


  • denrob
    April 10, 2007
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    great piece.