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♥Razorblade Addiction♥

 

 

The heat of your hate crystilized my heart,
Immaculate innocence turned embers, causes my soul to fray.
I disintegrate to ash, and have been set to the wind,
As my conterfiet smile begins to fade.

Lay me to rest with-in the elements,
Murder my purity and rip away the trust.
Try to veil and mask the pain,
Still these saphire veins tear beneath the rust.

A darkened memory, laced in broken flesh,
I fall away from reality.
So many voices billowing through my head,
I try to hold on but give in to my insanity.

The truth of my disgrace,
Reflects with-in the glass.
I'm a perfect imperfection,
Like porcelain lined in cracks,

Clouded diamonds slice the shell,
I get lost with-in the crimson.
I stumble and fall into filth,
Becomeing so beautifully wrapped in my razorblade addiction.

I'm a product of your perversion,
But am burdened by the blame.
Defiled by your hand, contaminated by your love,
I find peace with-in the silver and rip away the shame.

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about cutting...abuse....yeah...

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  • DestiniesTwined
    February 13, 2008
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    Good job keep writing.


  • SmokinHotWhiteTiger
    June 11, 2007

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    Quite Well Penned

    I am curious and I never got round to asking Chrissy this question but I was curious as to why you both write only about a razor blade and well cutting ect. I would imagine from my limited time I known both of you it has something to do with your past I would ascertain from it but then again I am not complaining. I enjoyed the poem and like how you both have a similiar style just a different unique way of penning your poetry. nice work and keep it up =} Signed, Paul =}


  • anguish
    April 30, 2007

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    Awesome

    Very powerful peice you've written here. even Though its not a rhymeing peice the word seem to roll off the toungue. the emotion is very strong and lets the reader invision the writers plight and what their going through. Superb job. Keep up the good work. *~*~*~Anguish*~*~*


  • JulietteArielle
    April 18, 2007

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    I love this poem! I have to read it slowly cuz there's so much to take in.

    I love the part that says, "I'm a perfect imperfection, Like porcelain lined in cracks," and the whole last two stanzas. Frickin amazing!


  • Never Fall in Love
    April 15, 2007

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    Hmm..
    This certainly reminds me of alot of things
    I'm not sure what to say anymore
    its really good
    keep it up
    the poem not the addiction

    NeveR ♥


  • Dirty and Broken
    April 14, 2007
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    beautiful, and i love the background as well, just so fitting

  • xUnseenLovex
    April 14, 2007

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    Great piece, it speaks really loudly - well to me anyway. A brilliant use of language which creates a wonderfully strong image.
    Well Done,
    Keep It Up,
    xUnseenLovex


  • MetalHouse III
    April 14, 2007

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    great work.well done
    I love this piece...it flows and the words are deep and meaningfull...keep writing

  • darktwistedmind
    April 13, 2007

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    i love your work. you are one of the best gothid poetry wirters i've ever read. i am so humbled when i read your work. i am just a beginner poet, and my work is nothing compsred to yours. at school people see me as just the quiet "emo" kid. i hate that. i hate sterotyping. nobody understands me. i kinda feel like you do, though, when i read your poems. great job....keep writing

  • virtual-darkness
    April 12, 2007

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    awesome

    hello, i am the stay sick guy. i just wanted you to know that i did not mean anything by it and i am sorry if i offended anyone by it. you and your gf/wife's love is beautiful and so is both of your poetry. the world needs you too so dont think about going anywhere soon. i have also updated my page and poetry so yeah go have a looksy if you want. keep it real and take care of yourself.


  • XXBrunettexBarbieXX
    April 11, 2007
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    Heya Babe this poem was absolutely beautiful one of your best yet..i really enjoyed reading this poem and can really relate to what you are saying and feeling in this write i love ya dont forget that and keep writting your so talented!

    love always chrissy


  • XMysticalNightmareX
    April 10, 2007

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    this is a great poem very scary very morbid but very well written i love the picture you used. Luv ya Ash

    xxo


  • Girl With Guitar silver member
    April 10, 2007
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    This couldn't be worded any better. One correction is a spelling mistake in the third line. "disinagrate" should be "disintegrate".
    Usually it hurts to say I can relate but you've written this so well that it doesn't.

    Great background, brilliant write,
    SLAM.

  • scarletstains
    April 9, 2007

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    This piece is beautiful... I love your choice of
    words here as well as the mental picture it paints
    for me.. Great write.. I can relate.
    8)


    • Bruised.Roses
      April 9, 2007
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      thank you both for such great comments glad you liked..wasnt sure if it was good.
      XtashaX


  • Defective Soul
    April 9, 2007

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    Omg, I love this poem. Like, honest to God, it's great. I love the imagery and.. everything about it. It's just perfect. The flow is great and so is the word use.

    I'm a perfect imperfection,
    Like porcelain lined in cracks,

    Ugh, I love it! Keep it up n tc.

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