the time will come
when i will unravel my song
from the accompaniment
of scars and sob.
i will love again
the stranger in my own arms,
the one who was my self,
who knows the sonority
of my voice by heart,
and say:
sit with me here.
sing.
Author notes
This is about finding yourself again in the after-effects of loss...and learn to love yourself...and sing your song again.
A contest entry
- ~ pare a cappella ~ by Heart Sutra.
525 points, ended April 10, 2007, 13 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - ~Golden Arena~ by Virgoan.
500 points, ended July 18, 2007, 18 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Little teardrops hang.
On my little eyes.
Because of this little poem.
With lots of emotion.
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Whew! This was smooth as silk...outstanding penning and most importantly...the words linger with the reader after, thought provoking! Congrats on the Shine, this was truly masterful work girl
~tia
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This is an awesome piece - profound in its brevity. Congratulations on the bronze trophy. Keep penning dear poet!
- joanne
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Awesome! The revelation and the afterthoughts in this message reflects to all of us.
Thanks so much for sharing this beautiful piece. I wish you all the best in the contest. Keep writing my friend.
~VIRGOAN~
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Beautiful
As with the accompanying photo, I read this work in black and white and was touched.
Terry
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I'm new to Allpoetry but have known your name from my Lover (who has been a part of this site for years). This is the first poem by you that I read. I think it's wonderful. It jolted me inspiration of a new kind.
-Zack -
when one is in the middle of mourning for any kind of loss, it's so hard to imagine that something comparable or better might later come to us. Of course, mourning death is an exception - but I mean regarding relationships, friendships, those dear to us that for any reason are no longer in our lives.
this poem reminds me of how hard I've fought in the middle of tear-fits at times to think "Hey! I've been there before, lived through it, endured, loved again, almost imagined that 'things happen for a reason' has some semblance of credibility.
I am reminded of that feeling with this poem - particularly in the closing stanza.
thanks so much for putting words so eloquently to such thoughts...
Kim
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Kim, thank you so much for such a wonderful comment...glad this struck a chord with you - we have to cherish our songs...and sing again
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First of all, let me say that i have missed your presence of late . . . and secondly, this write, this poem is one of the most moving pieces I have read in a long, long time . . . you addressed your inner person with a calmness and clarity that speaks of much wisdom and compassion . . . you are to be spiritually admired my dear lady . . . this was stunning and beautiful
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How could I have missed this? In the quiet of knowing oneself as love reflected is wholeness found... not just the knowledge of logic but the truth of being.
The voice of heart which sings in harmony with the One Altogether Lovely finds the blessing outpouring--fading the noise of dissonance.
Your song is beautiful, Nicci.
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Stunning
A minuture masterpiece. This small poem reminds me to recognize the importance of the synergy of words. To pierce the mind with javelins of these forged words is truly inspiring.
I was still with bewildered enlighthenment. It is amazing that written words and so few can be so strong. Thank you.
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This is very touching and beautiful...however it is interpreted. Lovely.
The image is stunning as well...I am going to look up the artist now.
You may not remember me but I used to writer here as BeautifulContradiction. Hello again! -
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Hi and welcome back!! Thank you - so wonderful to see you around here again!
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I LIKED IT
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brilliant!!
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I can see why this won Gold and why it is this weeks most popular poem on the site, it will be one of my favorite poems - a-n-y-w-h-e-r-e ...again i marvel at your ablity to reach below the concious levels of awareness and lift to daylight, marvelous revelations that resonate with so many...with my heart anyway...it reads so well on many levels of interpretation, the broken soul seeking resolution, the mother seeking solace, the lover honoring the relationship, the adult-child of abuse, mourning loss. I will hold this poem very close and listen for its tune. blessings and best wishes, ~richard
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Richard, thank you for the most beautiful comment. I'm happy that this poem resonated with you...hold your song close, my friend ~
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i love this!
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When I first saw this I honestly felt it was going to place highly, if not win the goldy. So glad to see it so, though I probably should not have worried ... if Zayra couldn't judge this highly, then nobody could
Congratsamundo
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Thank you for the lovely comment. I'm most pleased to have won this in Zayra's contest. ~
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SPEECHLESS!
The words are few that can adequately describe this beautiful poem ...
May you always sing my dear Nicolette ... Sing us the songs we all love to hear.
Many Blessings,
Sammy
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Sammy, thank you so much and wonderful to hear from you again. May you too keep singing your songs!
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My sweet Nicolette, ~sigh. Just beauty in this sadness. Yes, sometimes we just have to find ourselves again and love ourselves again. Your arms should never be empty my dear. You are much too lovely for that. Your day will come and probably sooner than you know. Love you. It's good to see you writing again.
~Lyrical
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Lyrical, thank you, dear friend. So good to see you too... missed you a lot! How are you doing - written anything while I was away..?
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Exquisite, and you are right the time will come, it always will come. Just beautiful Nicolette, your song will always be heard.
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I had to check who "photo wings" is...love your new name, Melissa. Thank you, my friend...
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Ahhhhhhh, this is quite beautiful... getting to "one's" self again! Oh yes, this is something I so well understand sweetie...glade to see you writing your lovely words that come so deeply from your heart! Congratulations your GOLD, so well deserved! Glad to see you back... Much love and many hugs your way dear one, Annie
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Hi Annie Thank you, my dear friend - so good to see you again - much love, Annie-girl
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I am pleased to see the healing begun; but it unravels so many scars to be sung about that I know i will read in time to come....
Welcome home darlin'
I can only hope all is well for you till you sing again.
Tamara
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Thank you, Tamara....yes, to heal one has to go back to the scars...and then sing. I am well, dear friend
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a beautiful and touching poem
a truly eloquent affirmation of the power of love to raise our spirits and heal our wounds, and it seems that this wonderful song has already begun. A beautiful interpretation here through an elegant message of empowerment so very well done...PK
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Thank you, PK. I'm happy that you enjoyed this little a cappella song of mine - best wishes ~
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What a nice comeback I'm glad to read your poetry again, Nicolette, and I like the hopeful tone at the end of this poem. Your simplistic but complex style never ceases to amaze me.
~Diana
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Thank you, Diana - good to see you again
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A great interpretaion of this picture - glorious gold is good - congratulations. Says much in these few lines.
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Thank you, grann ~
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congrats on the gold, it was a gold well-deserved...marvelous! i'd normally put my favorite lines here, as per my way of commenting, but that would mean copying and pasting the whole thing. and for the sake of space I wouldn't do that...brilliantly written and so compelling!
N
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Oh,Nicolette is back in the building!This piece has your own exquisite,truly exquisite touch and it is worthy of gold,it takes the reader to the ache of empty and then places the poignant hope of feeling,once more,full to the brim,so that even the soul sings acceptance,I weep reading your poetry,penned with artistry of the spirit and soul,my dear one,you grace beauty and you grace pain and you grace the page,I curtsey,applaud and sigh from my own soul,love and light,Yvette
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Yvette, thank you so much. You still are the queen of comments and your touch so very special and warm... thank you lady of love and light
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You truly are golden, Woman...Congrats, Sweetie...& welcome home, my Sister... Vlindertjie
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Thank you, Vlindertjie - for the welcome...for everything
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Wow...
I marvel at what comes from your poetic reservoir of thoughts...truly a song you sing is deeply embedded. I can only convey my thoughts with simplicity...you on the other hand do it with eloquence. Love it!
Congratulations on worthy Gold…Poet
Mal
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compelling! congrats on the gold
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Thank you, LadyLavender! ~
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oh you magnificent poet I always look forward to reading you!
congratulations on the gold...it was well deserved
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Thanks friend - good to see you again!
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You have been absent for a bit, but I am more than happy to see you back and posting your wonderful masterpieces again my dear friend
Although there's quite some sadness captured within this write, there's also the strong message that you will love again - no matter what, the stranger in your arms that reflects your self (and in future, the one that will complete the puzzle)
Great read to start this morning with
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And wonderful to start my day with your comment, Leander - glad to be back and see you again too. I have some catching up to do regarding your poetry!
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This is truly magnificent and just superbly penned. A masterpiece so deserving of gold. Congratulations... x Love and light, Butterfly.
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The word use and meter of this poem flowed so well, so natural that I actually kept losing my thoughts in the ease with which I read it. It took me several passes in stanza one lines three and four to get the grammar set in my mind.
This is a poem of emotion that I actually feel releasing the pain, it isn't about pain at all, or am I so far off that I sound like an imbecile?
The metaphor of the song tied with the mechanics, the vibration felt from the narrator sets the tone almost in a soliloquy.
Great work and good luck.
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I hear it in near distance
calling winds of heart
notes gathering melody
where a cappella starts.
Joy becomes a chorus
where life begin anew
a sweeter dance to step
when you remember you.
So good to see you here, Nicci.
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i will love again
the stranger in my own arms,
the one who was my self,
I love these lines and then ending words,
WOW - this is a beautiful poem,
we are forever changing, evolving from experience,
always must sing, I love this.
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"the time will come
when i will unravel my song"
Sighhh...& you will weave a brand~new symphony from the notes you've gathered in the garden, m'Lady...How wonderful this is, my Sister...How grand to have logged on & seen your trail...How lovely you are, my Friend...Welcome home, my Sister of the Soul...Ahhh, how I've missed your presence...Good luck in Zayra's contest, Sweetie... Vlindertjie
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It's lovely to see a new product of your pen, and more importantly your thoughts. I feel so connected to this piece, especially after reading the first stanza.
There's something about songs, something that detaches us from ourselves.
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I've missed your poetry Nicolette!
Verily, verily, sing with me. Loved it.
Jay
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Welcome home Nicolette! Such beauty in words has been sorely missed from your pen, this just proves what talent lies within you Love, C
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Remember the lips where wind-breath
originated, and let your note be clear.
Don't try to end it.
Be your note.
I'll show you how it's enough.
Go up on the roof at night
in this city of the soul.
Let everyone climb on their roofs
and sing their notes.
Sing loud!
~Rumi
so happy to hear from you again~
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Rumi...one of my alltime favourites. Thank you Sherry-Lee for the beauty of this comment. Good to see you again
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You're Back!
I've missed the resonance of your poetry, and your friendship. I loved this my friend, the alliteration of this line;
"from the accompaniment
of scars and sob"
This beautiful gathering of self, and song.. so you.
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Thank you, Kathleen...so good to see you again, my friend - I've missed you too
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So true, bbb...we need to embrace ourselves and our song....and sing, hard as it is. Thanks, bokkie
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the picture is so vital to this. very much, you've put this picture into words. yes, we all must sing and sometimes, thats so hard.
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Yay you posted something. This was truly beautiful and the opening stanza took my breath away.
hope you are well.
~helen
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Hi Helen - thank you, my friend - so good to see you again. I'm well - missed you!
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Well I and Allpoetry missed you.
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this is beautiful...
so nice to see you post something again
al
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Thank you, Al - nice to be back and I will catch up on your poetry soon
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A beautiful song of revival...soul come full circle to smile at soul and so chord in stuck in to harmonious notes laughing together...and I have to say it is great to have my hands come together for you again...poet of deeper forest to explore
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Thanks Rich - glad to have a friend who is a singer and songwriter as the first one to comment on my song.
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