I am Jonathan Harker, a subject
of Her Majesty, Queen Victoria,
and this will be my final journal entry,
for tonight will be my last night on this earth.
I am confined in this dreary,
candle-flickering room contrary to my will,
while below strange forces are ranged
against me. The Count, that suave
and smiling man--no, not man!--
will claim my soul tonight.
He is the spawn of the Beast,
a creature from the blackest depths
of Hell, and he will brook no
opposition. Oh God, what have
I done to deserve such an end:
how did I offend?
Dearest Mina, if you should read this,
please remenber me as once I was:
hale and whole and in good stead,
for soon I'll be among...the Un-Dead!
A contest entry
- welcome to the kingdom of books... by second-born.
600 points, ended April 21, 2007, 5 entries
Gold trophy winner
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I'm unfamiliar with the book but this letter makes a macabre backdrop for a ghost story.
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A terrific write. The language allows me to feel the era as if present. The final stanza asking to be remembered as he was is powerful, wouldn't we all like to be remembered at merry, whole, moral people in death despite whatever fate might deal us in death.
s and best wishes ~Genie~
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that's great...so much power and emotion...good luck
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I remember this version of the story. Very nice work. I feel though, that you haven't captured the character as he is or how he may have felt at the time. In the book it certainly captures his blasé English attitude, yet I feel he was more an innocent character. Maybe it's just my interpretation of the character as you do manage to convey his innosence, yet contrast between first and last stanzae, I feel that he'd be more likely to say
"He's a fine fellow of a chap,
Yet such strangeness comes of that
He never comes out of the night
Dearest Mina, what's his plight?"
in the last stanza, as opposed to
"He is the spawn of the Beast,
a creature from the blackest depths
of Hell, and he will brook no
opposition. Oh God, what have"
Nice piece nevertheless
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yes you got the gold trophy!!! while reading your poem, i felt that i was with jonathan harker while he writes this one in his diary!!! i really felt the emotions of a desperate man who knew at that time that he was going to die!!! the poem is well-written so i decided to give you the gold and the points!!! goodluck to you in your other contests!!! once again, thank you very much!!!
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loads packed in to this piece bill very enthralling as well keeps the readers attention from beginning to end great piece well done to you and good luck
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oh what a marvelous portrayal of Jonathan Harker!! i like your version so much better than Keanu Reeves!! you're awesome!!
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Brill Bill!
So much in 2 verses, very good write, I once did a poem on Dracular, with a view to doing the whole book in verse, I did 13 verses 8 lines to the verse and still did not finished the first chapter!! So I take my hat off to you. WASP.
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Am I mistaken Bill when I think of Bram Stokers Dracular here . I'm a bit of a scardy cat when it comes to vampire stories, but I did so like the Bram Stokers version. You have written well again my friend...mal
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