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Mustard March

We choked on mustard fumes.
Fresh tears stung our cheeks.
The smoke rose in sporadic plumes,
and darkened the sky for weeks.

We fumbled for our masks,
hid our fear behind foggy glass.

Deafened by artillery fire,
our fingers learned to speak.
Our eyes, though overtired,
interpreted the words with ease.

We wove through the debris from blasts,
felt our way through the thickening gas.

We trudged on through fields
littered with fear and death,
unable to surrender or yield,
our will the only thing we had left.

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pixxiepoetess
my theme: war, in all its not so glorious truth

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  • xandercheerios
    June 18, 2007

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    I love this theme, I have a poem I want you to read, I'll message it to you when I find it... and it's sporatic, not sporadic... I like this...in all its not so glorious truth. This theme is defintely worth pursuing, as most others themes are/likely will be about self hurt/cutting... so good luck! you won't need it:


  • Arkbear gold member
    April 10, 2007

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    My Dear >Pixxie

    Another fine example of what my oldest boy needs

     to read before leaving in July for bootcamp ~

     

    This is an awesome write with such wisdom

     from such a young soul as yours...

    ....I commend you for penning this for us ~

     

    It is a scary thing to think about, yet

    it is REAL....and it isn't going to stop

    anytime soon....but I still pray it does ~

     

    I wish I could give you 10000 clappers for this write,

    but I think you get the idea that I was touched by it

    and I find your interest in writing this admirable ~

     

    Thank you....and I shall show this to my boy,

    just as I have him sit and watch the Nightly News with

    me almost every night so he can see the truth about

    what is REALLY going on over there....or

    in any war for that matter ~

     

    God bless you my Dear for bringing this out in

    the open for more of us POETS to read ~

     

    VERY well done my sweet >Pixxie<

     

    I hope this contest is Judged on originality ~

     

    The best of luck to you ~

     

    Bear ~


    • pixxiepoetess
      April 10, 2007
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      I commend your son for the courage to fight for his country, but I understand your concern for him. I hope your worry will be in vain, and that God will watch over him while he while is abroad.


  • redmarkonthewall
    April 10, 2007
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    WWI I would have to say, especially since that is when gas warfare was first introduced. Mustard gas and chlorine gas where among the first. You did a good job writing this and it has some good imagery and you did good job depicting the use of gas warfare. Well done. Thanks for entering and good luck.