She bids him peek
neath sheerest
petticoats,
lackadaisical, honeyed
maiden -
enkindling, taunting
quivering petals
sprawled
in lavished allurement.
Resigned
in the moment
she toys
subtly seducing
beckoning
in hushed whispers
a late Spring's
romancing.
Author notes
FORM: Free Verse
A contest entry
- Picture Contest by wishintreeUK.
1700 points, ended April 14, 2007, 10 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I have wrote of lilies too although mine were quite innocent! This is so wonderful to read and enjoy.
The words and the flirt rise from the page....I had
to go back and read once more! Blue
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hey i'm surprised i beat this, 'tis superb! congrats on your silver trophy, very well done indeed,
excellent,
floorboards
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Congratulations on Silver, a beautiful entry.
~Katie~
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O wow, thank you so much for the trophy. This was such a lovely contest.
Belle
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Thank you for entering.
This is awesome! your words reflect the graphic beautifully.
Well done and thank you for entering
~Katie~
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Exquisite
What a delicate and exquisite piece of poetry, with not one well-placed, delectable word wasted. A real treat to read. Best of luck in the contest, This is surely a winner in my eyes. Pure and virtuous, yet sensuous simultaneously, as your lovely title 'Lily's Seduction' suggests.
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very fitting ♥
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ok, ummm,err, ahh, are we talking about butterflies here? i am not so convinced, there is too much depth to this to be as superficial as all that - too much subtle nuance reflecting an interpersonal relationship - too exotic a feel to be confined to a garden - it escapes all confinements, breaks free of its boundary and allows the mind to freely dwell in imaginings of clandestine summer trysts, Very nice imagery, brilliant assonance, a joy to read aloud. Blessings and best wishes, ~richard
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bravo
So lovely and so deftly turned upon your lathe of poetry ...bravo...bravo...bravo...
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subliminal
How in a night a lily hushes a butterfly to seduction; inuendo of love and passion of all that is flower.
loved this magic spun ..a dream of night quill.
It was a lyrical magic classic.If I should be that butterfly ..ooo lala lol
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lackadaisical oh my
Forget rhyme…this exquisite delight eloquent with charm
sings without it.. Connotation to blossoms in bloom
touched tenderly upon the natural order of human sexuality…
love the conceived words used to recite your precious poem of natures relations
I need not add anything by way of commentary to this lovely writing
Except my applause….and a warm hug sweetie….
Love it! poet
Mally
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Not the birds 'n the bees but
the fragrant lily and the Monarch butterfly. The message is the same. Some kind of wonderful attraction is usually at the root of sexual reproduction, even for lilies. Your short lines suit admirably a short free verse poem and give a sense of value to your words. Fine work, dear poet.
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Beautiful!
and a little frisky, lol, love the imagery and vocabulary! Good luck!
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WOW
This is so well written. It is beautiful, but yet it seems to have a seductive side to it. I don't know why I think it is seductive, but i do. I really like this. -
you write so eloquently...well done.
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