Dreams hide so easily when they're doubling as stars
Seems like you're losing me, you've certailny lost my heart
But living forgets
And no-one regrets
The truth is never truth
When I'm with you
Seems like ten years since I last saw your eyes
Every time I remember you, another memory dies
But I am not scared
Because you were never scared
Each time I see your eyes
It's another life we shared
But living forgets
And no-one regrets
The truth was never truth
When I was with you
Take away the pain, take the heart, take the dreams
Take away the shame, take the heart, break the seams
But living forgets
So no more regrets
The truth is never truth
I am with you
Nothing forgets
No more regrets
The truth is never truth
I am with you...
Author notes
Crappy lyrics that I wrote a while ago for one of my bands.
I think it was Neon Skies. I'm not sure.
anyway. yeah. tell the truth.
Please tell me what you think
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this is definatly not crappy, it is very well written and lacks no emotion what so ever. The flow is a lovely steady pace and i simply loved it!!
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Ars Poetica!
Not only would this make a damn good rock song, it is lovely poetically. Now, I love some of the internal points (they show, even if you didn't mean them to seem this way):
The truth was never truth
When I was with you:
Now, is love very truthful? I think not. A lot of it is s careful coutrship, etiquette, and deception. So its hard to find the candor necessary for a loving relationship sometimes.
But living forgets
And no-one regrets:
Each time you use this phrase you mean it in a slightly different way. That's a nice quality. And it is true. We go on in life, we forget; it's not because its painful sometimes, but its human nature. People need to move on and not regret the past.
The title intrigues me. I could go into a whole analysis of it, but I have no time. (AP English is pressing my time schedule into a tiny black hole, basically) Simply put, I love the simplicity you create while riddling it with small incongruities and complexities.
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It needs a bit of work, but it definitely has potential.
"Every time I remember you, another memory dies"
--this is the best line, I feel. It's like a contradiction but I'm not sure, I just love it.
Here are my suggestions:
"break the seams"
--I don't know how often seams break ... they more so tear, rip or something along those lines. But those are pretty cliché words. Hm, possible change though?
"But living forgets
So no more regrets"
--I don't really get this, it seems unclear. But what do I know? -
aww, these arent crappy! i like it! the lyrics give a mysterious feel because of the questioning and longing. i can see this being like a techno song. the band neon skies sounds so appropriate for this song ^.^
LXF
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