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Pondering

Preoccupied with death
Pausing the whirling hour
Protracting the short minute
Peace prolongs soul`s seeking
Patiently recalling
Past memories of joy
Permanently held

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  • ShelleyA
    April 20, 2007

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    A nice write and title. Nice flow and tone. Nice depth of feeling. Good word choice. Nice alliteration and assonance. Your poem fits the picture for which it was written. Thank you for your entry. Shelley


  • acqua
    April 14, 2007

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    This so complements the picture, with that 'pause' with all the death the soldier faces and having that moment of peace to hold onto those precious 'past memories of joy'. Good Luck in the contest!


  • bethan-gaze
    April 10, 2007

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    As usual, your poetry shines and this pleiades is no exception. "Patiently recalling/past memories of joy/permanently held" - best lines.