You think he's perfect one of a kind
Until he drives you out of your mind
No he's perfect, just want I need
He will stand there and let you bleed
No, he will help me, like he did before
No he'll leave you like you are a whore
No he won't, stop saying he will
Admit it Hon, all he did was take you for a thrill
He doesn't love you so why do you go running back
Because I love him and without him my heart will bleed black
Yeah ok, that's nice for you to try believe
But look at what he did to you, just roll up those sleeves
Those are accidents and are left in the past
You ask god at night, how long will this last
Don't tell me your fine when even you know you're not
Just leave, cause with him, low self-esteem is all you got
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Speechless? I thought you would be
Have my words finally made you see?
That he played you, like he did the rest
Leaving him would be the best
I know things will get better, just wait and see
Yeah ok, that's pretty hard to believe
He cheated and cheated and lied and lied
How many more times are you just gonna let it slide on by
I gave him more chances because he came back
If he didn't love me, he would have packed
He's using and playing you don't you fucking see
Why the hell am I even trying you don't believe me
So fine, go on, and mess up your life
But don't come crying to me when he pulls out a knife
And you know he will, don't you dare say he ain't that kind of guy
He's the kind that tries to kill you from the inside
So go ahead fuck up your life, see if I care
Just know that when he hurts you again I ain't gonna be there
Fine go ahead I'll prove you fucking wrong
I'll show you that we were met to be all along
So this good-bye from me to you
I know deep down none of what you said was true
I feel bad because you have to figure out the hard way
I just wish you could have lived another day
Author notes
Option #6:
Write a poem as if the heart and the mind were arguing with each other. What are they arguing about?
A contest entry
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525 points, ended April 20, 2007, 65 entries
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Whoah... I can relate SO much to the theme of your "brain and your heart" arguing. I remember when I had doubts about whether or not someone really had feelings for me when she said so, and it was always my emotional side saying she didn't like me, but my logical side saying she did. Okay, so it's a little backwards in my case, but even so, except for a few technicalities, I felt like the first half was written for me, almost. It's such a tricky feeling. But, you were strong with it. The ending was a little, out of nowhere, but that did make it dramatic which was very good. Kudos! -
Wow. Intense and incredible. I'm inspired to write a poem like this. I love what you did with it! Congratulations on the gold!--This is definitely worthy of it!! Great write. Thanks for sharing. Take care.
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awesome
I love it I added you as a favorite I just love it allot I hope one day you can chek out mine
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